For girl who stare

Day

faded away

and I,

two steps ahead

of the mind

in my head,

want you to be here,

in my mind, so you can hear

all this dreary talk;

But before you 

walk in nest

of thoughts and dreams

that never rests,

you should know

that you may find

yourself in there,

-but who would care?

Reviews

[Nicole]

Its really good! I love the layout! You should keep writing.

[isus]

thanx, glad you like it :)

[Luna Zerimar]

You're really good.

I don't see how you don't believe that.

Keep writing!

[isus]

well, there is really two or three things i wrote that i can say i like, so i can't belive in that

[Luna Zerimar]

Well, we all have our opinions, right?

[isus]

i guess that's right

[L4rn13]

Short and straight to the point. Nice.

[isus]

glad you like it

[Ren Grace]

Beautiful and a great read!

[isus]

i don' belive you :)

[Inda]

Amazing! Again you knock it put of the park with that last line! Leaves the reader thinking. Good job.

[isus]

thank you Inda

[MsJewel]

Your words are simple (I like that) and yet you have written something quite thought provoking. Wonderful writing and a pleasure to read!

:) Julie

[isus]

thank you Julie, so glad you like it :)

[goldifada]

nice poem !! :) simpl and grat work

[isus]

thank you :)

[melissa]

Awesome poem keep up the great work and keep sending me more to read i love reading them

[isus]

thanx melissa

[melissa]

Your welcome

[KWP]

I like the ending ... but who would care? sums up life really when we live and die and really nothing matters.. I like this the best of yours that I have read so far .. well done x

[isus]

well, i don't like many of my work but this one i can say i like also. anyway, thanx on reading, glad you like it :)

[Bluefire]

Swimming through someone else's mind to find yourself among their thoughts. (What a tongue twister!)
Kind of sci-fi.
Nice.

[isus]

thanx blue

[Bluefire]

You're welcome!