United Prayer

I was asked by a friend to write a poem on the theme, Praying for Peace. This is it.

 

United Prayer

 

Painted in a corner

Smeared about the floor

Chants of lone forgiveness

Quiet in the war

 

“Deafening the sound of death”

 

Garden roses trampled

Broken stems abound

Wilting on the visions

Blooming losses found

 

“Petals of peace scattered carelessly”

 

Blood along the pathway

Eyes hid in the mist

Penning someone else’s name

On this lengthy list

 

“Alphabetical to the grave”

 

Standing from the shadows

Crossing battle lines

Reaching for the freedom

Voices loud can find

 

“Speak up children, your voices matter”

 

Put aside your weapons

Time has come to cease

The nation now has gathered

United prayer for peace

 

“On our hands and knees we pray… send the evil far away”

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Artwork by Sally K. Green

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[Leigh]

The way you have it set out it gives it great pace and correct emphasis, I really like this Jack

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I think that this is quite brilliant.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much. Someone on this site asked me to write a poem in the theme, a prayer for peace, and this is what I came up with.

[icelandicblue]

Oh Jack, if only we could or wood. But we may have to start with a handful of prayers and watch them grow. I pray that someday this world will evolve into a peaceful planet. Amen.

[Jack...]

Yes indeed, wouldn't it be nice...thanks again my wonderful friend.

[TrimarcoRansome]

A prayer indeed, wouldn't this world benefit from your prayer of peace! beautifully penned work

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much. I am so sorry I failed to see that you had reviewed my poem. I do appreciate your visit.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Quite in the war - this line striked me as one to re-read, well done.

[Jack...]

Thanks Thomas, this was written at the request of a friend.

[Vikrantsingh]

Good work :) really enjoyed Jack.
Proper Sync and wonderfully narrated :)

Enjoyed :)
Singh :)

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Sir. A friend on the site asked me to write a poem for her themed "Praying for Peace" and this is what I wrote. I am happy you enjoyed it.

[Vikrantsingh]

Wow thats great :) Jack, Please don't address me Sir :)
I respect more if you call me Singh/Vik/Vicky or Friend :)

Cheers!
Singh :)

[Vikrantsingh]

You are elder to me, I respect you more than I do to my self :)

[Frieda P]

Gotta love this guy Jack....

[Vikrantsingh]

:)

[Frieda P]

:-)

[Jack...]

Wait, let me push my walker aside so I can type better. (Damn tennis balls keep falling off) :) read moreWait, let me push my walker aside so I can type better. (Damn tennis balls keep falling off) :)
Just kidding. No problem my friend. I will use, Vik.

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you Jack *Hugs*
Stay happy and blessed like you poem :)

Thanks Fredia as always :)

- Singh :)

[Frieda P]

If I hang out here will I be blessed too? :-)

[Vikrantsingh]

Yes Fredia, God Bless You :)

[Vikrantsingh]

Yes Fredia, God Bless You :)

[Kristin Lee]

Send the evil far away...I wish I knew where we would sent it. It seems its everywhere. I admire the sentiments in this poem Jack. Its values have a strong voice. And the last line , though religious in nature, speaks universally across religions and faiths, even to those who are more spiritual. Evil is something we'd all like to see driven far far away.

[Jack...]

I was thinking we'd send them to Washington...ooops too late. Thanks Kristin, I figured I mix a little politics with the religion. :)>

[Kristin Lee]

Hahaha. Yeah, I agree, probably a little late for that :)

[Astro]

Interesting idea. I'm not a religious man, but I wouldn't begrudge a prayer like this.

[Jack...]

A prayer is nothing more than a wish to whomever we think might grant that wish. Thanks so much my friend.

[Astro]

You're welcome

[jacob erin-cilberto]

your usual...so well done...i like the separated lines that make a poem within a poem...

if only we could have world peace...something we all hope to envision one day.

poets spread the word, but who listens?

jacob

[Jack...]

We can only hope that some will listen. Thank you so very much Jacob.

[carol burgess romance]

I love this, wonderful prayer

[Jack...]

Your kind words are making me smile this morning. I appreciate you.