You Tonight

 

 

You Tonight

 

 

 

 

Your beauty my passion

Your love is my light

Your heart my perfection

I need you tonight

 

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[prachi prangya agasti]

short and sweet... nicely expressed...

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Prachi

[Traci]

Short and bittersweet. Words beautifully expressed, full of love and longing. Hard to pick a favorite, quickly becoming a fan of your writing :)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

:( This is so bittersweet... Beautiful, but yet there is a heartstring of tragedy pulling at me with these lines. A delicate and concise weaving of emotion that is not unlike a warm blanket on a cold night. I like the flow and the feel of this one, because it does not seem too deliberate, rather it just seems to "work" as it should without trying. One of my current favorites of yours, Jack.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Sarah. I am very pleased you enjoyed this. Thanks again.

[ShelleyA]

Hi Jack. A lovely title that suits the subject of your poem. A beautiful write about this special love that is short, concise and succinct. Skillfully crafted rhyming poetry which I enjoy. Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Very nice rhythm and enjambment. Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab. A good mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Deep expression of emotion; so loving and romantic. Good word choice as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. A delightful write. Well penned and a much enjoyed read.

[Jack...]

Wow Shelley, who would have thought a short poem like this would receive a beautiful and very much enjoyed long review like yours. Thank you so much. I really love it, you have made me smile this day. Thank you again

[ShelleyA]

You're very welcome Jack. i love brevity and this poem expresses it at its best. It's always a pleasure to read your poetry. Take care and have a great night!

[Dr. Wood ?]

make a great lyric jack...It's not easy to get so much into so few lines

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Doc.

[s y e]

What a beautiful write before I log off, this is beautifully said in just a few lines. Wow Jackomantic - superb.

[Jack...]

Thank you my sweet friend. Have a good night

[s y e]

Thank you, and you, too.

[shallimarRose]

Beautifully said... xo Rose

[Jack...]

Thank so much my romantic friend.

[David Scott]

Sometimes a few words say it all.
I hope she was there for you.

[Jack...]

Thanks David...but sadly, no...she wasn't.

[Blue Ivory]

The title has a typo, lol. I read the poem a few times to see if that was intentional...
I love this picture you're used! It's so beautiful and full of perspective! I would've never thought of making butterfly wings out of faces! Now, for the poem. Now when your write something so short, it's hard to pick a favorite line, since part of it is powerful and strong. Sweet as usual. I can picture the value of every line as I read it.

[Jack...]

Thanks my friend, I have now fixed the title. Sheesh, I never saw that, I appreciate you stopping by and leaving such kind words for me.

[Blue Ivory]

Anytime :)

[Frieda P]

I give it three S's....short, sweet & swoonworthy.

[Jack...]

Swoonworthy, I liked that, I'd like more. :)