The next best thing

 

The next best thing

 

Dark shadows hug the ceiling

Like so many helium balloons

Carelessly released by a child

Reaching for the next best thing

 

Eventually they will fall weary

Cascading in monochrome misery

Suffocating my empty world

In languishing latex and rubber

 

And I sit on the cold floor waiting

Staring above at my timely demise

Finally coming to the realization

I am not the next best thing

Reviews

[Baby Ricochet]

There's something in the last two lines of the second stanza about finding empty solace in a cheap hooker which (for me at least) adds to the desperation of the piece. Great work Jack.

[therisa]

Sigh. Wish I knew the solution to the emotional problems, which you, so brilliantly, write about. For there would be, two less lonely and hurt people, in the world. Would you accept a hug, from me, Jack?

[Jack...]

Thank you for the hug Therisa. I appreciate your kindness

[therisa]

Your welcome, (((((Jack))))).

[Mark]

A well written work of sadness, loneliness, and low self esteem.

[Jack...]

Thanks Mark. I appreciate you stopping by.

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

You painted this picture very well and yet so sad. thank you for sharing nice work. Blessings

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much. I am thrilled you enjoyed this.

[Frieda P]

You paint a sad picture here Jack, reminds me of when my boys were younger. As adults it seems we still are doing the same thing, human nature, not it's finest moment I guess.

[Jack...]

Yep, it's hard when every time you try to stand up you get knocked right back down. Thanks so much Frieda.

[Frieda P]

You know that quote Jack, fall down 7 times, get up 8 or however it goes....my pleasure always.

[lovejulez03]

This was short and sweet but far from simple. You painted an honest picture without overdoing it or making it too mundane. Very well written and I thoroughly enjoyed it :)

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much for your kind words today. I truly appreciate you stopping by.

[Tina Louise UK]

Oh so very somber Jack, but brilliantly done :) x

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Tia. I love having you stop by.

[BlackRose]

Described so well a sad person not satisfied with how they think are viewed by another. Well done as always.

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[Jack...]

Thank you my friend. I am always smiling when you visit.

[BlackRose]

I am always too when you stop around to mine. :o) Your muchly welcome.

[Kristina Moulaison]

I love this illustration...imagining people as dropped balloons and just how haphazard it all feels...the wide eyed child, never satisfied, and the balloon, drooping but set aloft to wander, forgotten. Really good!

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much my friend. I appreciate your kindness today.

[Brittany Zedalis]

Eventually they will fall weary
Cascading in monochrome misery

Splendid write, Jack.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my friend.