Light in the Dark

Light in the Dark

A Poem by J
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Just came into mind

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I was like an abandoned child

Crying in the darkness

No one to save me

I couldn't escape the wilderness

 

Innocent as I was

What was I to do

Patiently I wait 

For my Light in the Dark

 

"Hello"someone said

From the start I knew who he was

The man I have loved

The man who set me apart

 

"Forgive me"he cried

I quickly forgave

His voice was so sweet 

He was my Light in the Dark

 

Comforting his warmth was

Love was all I could feel

His sincerity surrounded me

My heart he can fully heal

 

All my gratitude

I give to you

My Light in the Dark

Yes,it has always been you


 

 

 

© 2010 J


Author's Note

J
Sorry if it sucks.I just really wanted to post something.

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It don't suck. Loneliness and fear is strong in the words. Waiting for a light in the dark brought hope. Left us with a mystery who pick up the character in the poem. You are a very good writer. I started writing 35 years ago. I still have the notebooks and journals. I re-write them better today. But with old age we should become smarter.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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This was very good!

Posted 9 Years Ago


There is nothing sucky about it. I see tru emotion through your words, and I in a way felt what you flet, that is if my feeling matched yours.

This is a good style, i liked it very much. Keep up the good work. :D

Posted 9 Years Ago


Agrees with apocalypse, sweet write :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

grammar: 5th stanza .."he's" should be "his"

good work ..chaste as usual ...you write really really sweetly ..:)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It don't suck. Loneliness and fear is strong in the words. Waiting for a light in the dark brought hope. Left us with a mystery who pick up the character in the poem. You are a very good writer. I started writing 35 years ago. I still have the notebooks and journals. I re-write them better today. But with old age we should become smarter.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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MZ
Wow, thats really good. It doesn't suck at all.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Actually a very pleasant piece to read, as we're all looking and hoping for that "light in the dark" at one time or another.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i loved it, i think i got what the meaning was ... Excellent vocabulary a happy ending to it (which i like) and overall i could read it numerous times. :D.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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