Goodbye.

Goodbye.

A Poem by Jamie
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a short one :)

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The sweet cold embrace of the razor's kiss

Is a feeling of happiness he will never miss

The angels in heaven are screaming his name

As souls of the dead writher in pain.

© 2014 Jamie


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Beautiful poem , written great I love it

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamie

9 Years Ago

Thank you! I always appreciate your feedback :)
Tragic but beautiful... sad that he felt the only way to find happiness was to slice his life away but I'm guessing it was wrist but that's just where my mind went .

Keep writing ...





Posted 9 Years Ago


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Layi Tate

9 Years Ago

I don't care I love it I enjoy pieces that I can relate to on a spiritual level ....
Keep goin.. read more
Jamie

9 Years Ago

Thank you :) I will :)
Layi Tate

9 Years Ago

Thanks... :)
Such beautiful melancholic simplicity. Great job, yet again!!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamie

9 Years Ago

You are too kind :) Thank you so much :)
misha

9 Years Ago

you are welcome =)
This is short but has so much depth into it. Your words are really powerful.
Even your flow and rhyming are great. Would love to read more by you :)
Keep writing!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamie

9 Years Ago

Thank you! I will be adding more soon :)
Even though it's short it is very deep and can get a feeling out of it

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamie

9 Years Ago

Thank you :)
I don't know what a "razor's kiss" is necessarily, but it sounds poetic and I like it,
I like "The angels in heaven are screaming his name/as souls of the dead writher in pain." It sounds very cheery even with all the mortality mess

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamie

9 Years Ago

Thank you :)
This is AMAZING!! so short but so POWERFUL!!!!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamie

9 Years Ago

Thank you :)
If I interpret this correctly then it's quite sad.
Short... But impactful.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Love.

"The sweet cold embrace of the razor's kiss is a feeling....he will never miss."

Loved those lines. The imagery is profound.



Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamie

9 Years Ago

Thank you :)

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Jamie
Jamie

Barnsley, United Kingdom



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