I Hope It Was Worth It

I felt it all, inside and out, and when you broke it off, I became a shell with a gaping hole...the piece of me you stole.

I felt you forget me

But I forgave you.

I heard the hurt inside me

But at least it healed you.

I know you saw my tears

But you stood there, amused.

I tasted pain and blood

But it was because you took it from yourself and gave it to me.

I smelled my own sorrow

But you stared at me blankly.

I reached out to touch you

But you shook your head tentatively.

I squeaked in pain

But you passed by me then.

And after time passed and I died inside

You survived, triumphant in your success of ridding yourself of me.

I hope it all was worth it.

Reviews

[SaitenHazard]

Don't know if it was worth it, but the poem was definitely worth writing. I believe the first line should have been "I felt you forgot me". But all in all the poems nice, not fabulous or awesome but good, maybe a little short of great.

Not going to rate it though but thanks for blessing us with your creativoty.

[Riley Bray]

Thank you very much for the review, first of all. Aside from that, I understand what you're saying and will take that to heart, for sake of making it clearer, however the reason I wrote, "I felt you forget me," was because I meant it literally, meaning not that I was feeling unnoticed by the man, but that I felt the moment he was uncertain of me. Thank you for your good judgement as well as review again. :)

[LadySoDivine]

A really good piece, I can relate to the pain of having someone you truly care about use you and toss you away, never regarding your feelings. It's a horrible, horrible thing and I wouldn't wish it to anyone, not even my worst enemy. You captured that feeling well. Great job!

[Riley Bray]

Thank you!

[Just Kim]

I really liked this write alot,
simply wonderful

[Riley Bray]

Thanks. :)

[Jeremia]

I can feel the pain. Take heart tho, for it will fade and the true beauty inside of yourself will become clear.

[Riley Bray]

That's very nice of you, thank you.