Vampire's

Vampire poem hope you like it

    first version 

Vampire's lurking the night sky,

Looking for souls to steal,

They want your blood,

They want your soul,

They want to steal you away,

Vampire's like to play,

Play head games,

They are very seductive,

They lust upon your deep dark blood,

They thirst upon your blood,

SO if your out at night,

You better watch your back 

     second version 

  vampires

vampires lurking the night sky, 

looking for souls to steal, 

they want your soul, 

they want to steal you away in the darkest of the night, 

vampires like to play, 

playing head games is always fun, 

very seductive, 

they lust upon your deep dark blood, 

better be careful, 

going out at night, 

you better watch your back

Author's Note

hope you like this poem
let me know if you like the first version or the second version better

Reviews

[Starcaller]

Nice, direct and to the point, a couple errors but overall it's good.

[Heromen Selena]

I like this poem :) It fits the theme of vampires very well. I like the special inflection of "SO" in the second to last line. Just a little punctuation error that I may have found. When you say "vampire's" do you mean "vampires"? The way you use the apostrophe makes it so that whatever follows the word is possessive to the noun. But other than that good poem :)

[Coffee Vampier]

Very vampirc it reminds me of my own book that ive been writing hopefully soon ill be able to show it to everyone

[Coffee Vampier]

Very vampiric, I enjoyed this it reminds me of my own book im writing

[Confuser]

You are a very good writer! Very frightening. Thank you. Dale

[Emrick]

You made it as frightening as possible in very few words.
It's an interesting piece.

[LadyNaida]

Interesting poem. Vampires do desire the blood but most of all the live for the hunt. :)

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Man...If I find that I left anything in my car tonight...
It will just have to wait until tomorrow!!!

[SmittyJas]

Very creative of the blood sucking vampire and the way he destroys life and never really sets it free Makes another vampire bat out of little old me.

[TPK Stories]

A very seductive vampire poem....