THE MYSTERY MALL

this one mall you don't want to shop in

THE MYSTERY MALL

Oh please like I really believe all those stupid stories about your dad’s store and the rest of the mall being haunted when it closes by some strange creature curse Tommy Cub frowned

You’d have to be a total blockhead to fall for that lame story he added

Oh yah! Hotshot why don’t you prove just how brave you are. I bet that you and your side kick Sammy wouldn’t last an hour in there after it closes Robby Horse smirked

Oh yah! well I‘ll take your stupid bet and if we lose which we won’t but if we do. I’ll let you’ve my favorite video game Fox Killer to keep Tommy answered

Great you got yourself a bet Robby said and if I lose which I highly doubt it. I’ll let you and Sammy have anything you want out of my dad’s shop free of charge. Do we’ve a deal? Robby asked

Deal we’ll meet you back here after the mall closes tonight Tommy answered

Tommy couldn’t wait to go back to their club house and tell Sammy about the bet he just made with Robby

Are you nuts Tommy? Why did you make such a stupid bet with him without checking with me first Sammy frowned

Oh relax Sammy don’t tell me that you believe all those stupid stories he’s been telling everyone? Tommy asked

No

Then? Okay I’m sorry it was very wrong of me to accept the bet without asking you first. But I couldn’t help it I don’t know what came over me. I just want to prove him wrong so he can stop telling those retarded stories over and over again. And besides think of all the cool stuff we’re going to get from his dad’s skate shop when this is all over Tommy explained

Later that night they met Robby by the back entrance of the mall

Okay here’s a couple of flashlights and a time watch that will tell you exactly how much time you’ve left. That’s if you two make it pass five minutes Robby smirked and guys it’s still not too late for you to change your minds

Don’t hold your breath Robby we got this in the bag don’t we Sammy? Tommy answered

Yah in the bag Sammy mumbled

Okay but don’t say that I never warned you Robby laughed as he unlocked the doors and let them in

Good luck boys trust me you’re going to need it!

Okay big mouth now what? Sammy asked

Well we can’t just stand here for an hour Robby’s watching us through the window. I guess we look around Tommy shrugged

As the elevator doors slid open they spotted a duffel bag inside of it. Tommy pick it up and opened it

There’s a note inside of it I bet it’s from Robby

Just to prove that you guys did go to every floor I need you to grab these things that I wrote down and bring them to me Robby

What a tool! Tommy said okay the first item on his stupid list is a man’s leg

A man’s leg? Sammy frowned what’s that all about

I don’t know dude but we are soon bout to find out Tommy answered as he pressed the button for the first floor

Soon they were walking out of the elevator and into a dim light men clothing dept.

You don’t think that we’re supposed to take one of the legs off those creepy dolls do you Sammy asked

Well they do have legs Tommy laughed then walked over to one that was dressed in a wet suit and said

Dude I’m sorry but I need to borrow your leg for a few hours I promise to bring it back when we’re done

Tommy bent down besides the doll and slowly twisted off his leg. He was about to stand back up when a cold and strong hand grabbed him by the collar and growled

GIVE ME BACK MY LEG!

Holy crap! They are coming back to life! Sammy yelled before he started to run back towards the elevator again

Hey stop those kids! They’re trying to steal my leg! The doll yelled. Suddenly every doll in the store turned their heads towards Tommy and Sammy

Tommy just give it back its leg and let’s get out of here while we still can

GIVE US BACK HIS LEG! They all yelled

Okay you dummies! You want it back so bad! You got it! Tommy screamed then threw the leg as hard as he could knocking them down like a big stack of bowling pins. They quickly ran to the elevator

Tommy quick close the doors!

I’m trying! Tommy answered as he pressed on the button. One of the dolls tried to push the leg into the narrow elevator doors just before it’d close. But the doors were to powerful and broke it in half

Oh wow! That was close Tommy added picking it up and putting it inside the duffel bag

Maybe we should just forget the whole thing and get out of here before things start to get really weird Sammy told him

Yah maybe but how do we know that Robby didn’t somehow rigged those dolls just to freak us out? Tommy answered

Make sense okay what’s next on his list? Sammy asked. Tommy took out the list from his back pocket and said

That will be on the second floor a bottle of poison perfume

Perfect Sammy mumbled

Relax dude there’s no way it’s really poisonous that’s just the name of it or something Tommy shrugged

Right and freaky dolls always come to life as soon as the store closes Sammy smirked. The elevator jerked as it stopped on the second floor Tommy peeked before he stepped out of the elevator

Okay the coast is clear now I think the perfume counter is over there by that far wall

How are we going to find the right one there has to be a million brands Sammy asked

It doesn’t matter we’ll just grab the first bottle and we’re out of here Tommy answered dude what’s the matter?

I don’t know but I think that something just bite my leg Sammy answered. Tommy looked down at Sammy’s leg

Oh gross dude! Your leg it’s all covered with bugs!

Well don’t just stand there help me get them off they’re really biting me now! Sammy cried

Okay try to stand still Tommy popped off one of the bottles of perfume and started to spray his leg with it

Stop stretching it you’re only going to make it worst Tommy scowled him

I can’t help it I can still feel them crawling on me so where do we’ve to go next? Sammy asked

Umm the baby place

The baby place? Sammy frowned

Yah and get a pair of baby booties how weird is that? Tommy laughed. They were still joking and laughing when the elevator doors opened

Hey look! Sammy said pointing to a large card board of a family of blue birds

Wow! Talk about your good luck that card board has little booties typed to it Tommy added. He then walked over and took them off

Hey Tommy or you feeling okay? You look a little strange Sammy frowned

Tommy just looked at him with a terrifying look on its face before he fell to the floor stiff as a board

Oh crap! Dude don’t worry I’m going to find a way to turn you back. He turned around and screamed when he saw that the baby’s partners were standing right behind him. Tommy desperately tried to help Sammy before he also became a piece of card board he kicked over a stand that had a bunch of teddy bears on it down to the floor. Sammy

picked up one of the bears up from off the floor and threw it at them knocking the card board on the floor. He then grabbed as many bears as he could and dropped it on them

Okay that takes care of them I’ve an idea I think that the glitter on the card board is what turned you into one. I hope that if I can wipe it off you’ll be okay again

Sammy returned a few minutes later with a small fan then starting blowing off every bit of glitter that he saw on Tommy’s body

Yes it working!

A few more minutes later Tommy was back to normal

Wow! I really that that I was a goner for sure thanks Sammy!

Yah you ain’t the only one let’s just get out of here I had enough of this place Sammy answered. When they got inside the elevator Sammy pushed the ground floor button but instead of going down it went up straight to the next floor

Oh great I guess until we finish going through every floor it doesn’t let us go back down Tommy shrugged but this floor shouldn’t be so hard I was here last week with my dad I know exactly where the silver arrows are. Sammy was going to answer him when a flying arrow zipped right by their heads and into the wall

Whoa! Where did that come from? Tommy cried out as he and Sammy ducked down behind a basket of base balls. A few seconds later they

peeked their heads up and spotted the shooter it was an old fox dressed in old fashion clothing

Oh terrific we’re getting attacked by Robin Hood, Tommy smirked

Very funny dude instead of making jokes why don’t you help me try to make peace with him Sammy frowned. He then cried out

Please stop shooting we’re not your enemy

Show yourself why have you entered my kingdom? The fox barked

Umm my name is Sammy and me and my friend Tommy we know it’s stupid but we made a stupid bet with Robby that if we could get all the items on his list we can get free stuff from his dad’s skate store. So all we’ve to find is a silver arrow and we will be out of your way we didn’t mean to disturb you

Oh when I was a young lad I also made silly bets but I must know does this bet include you fighting the evil beast on the top floor? The fox asked

The evil beast? Tommy asked

Oh my didn’t sir Robby tell you about the evil beast

Umm no he fail to mention it Tommy mumbled

I see then let me aid you in a small way please take this silver arrow and this magical chant it’ll help you kids in destroying the beast the fox smiled

Sir we can’t thank you enough Sammy smiled

Yes thank you Tommy added

Farewell my young lads and best wishes! The fox bowed before he disappeared in to thin air

When they got back inside the elevator Sammy turned to Tommy and said

Okay let’s do this

Are you sure we can just find a way out of here if you wanted to Tommy asked him

No I want to we got all the stuff right?

Tommy held up the duffel bag and answered

Yep it’s all right here

Then let’s finish it last floor coming up! Sammy laughed

When the elevator doors opened it was pitch black

Dude talk about your black out I can’t see anything Sammy said

Hold on I think I’ve my pocket flashlight with me Tommy answered he pulled it out and turned it on causing an eerie dim light inside the room

Oh crap! Tommy look over there! Sammy cried out Tommy turned a saw a ugly mutant creature that looked just like Robby smiling at them

Hey guys what took you so long? He asked

Robby? Is that really you? Tommy asked

Yep surprise! I told you guys that my dad’s store was cursed but what I didn’t say was that part of this curse turns me into this creature until the next morning Robby sighed that’s why I keep making all these silly bets hoping that someone would make this far and help me figure out how to break it

Oh wow! No wonder we had to get all this stupid stuff here why don’t we start with some sweet perfume Tommy said then walked over towards him and started spraying him

Oh gross! You just sprayed it in my mouth Robby chocked

Dude I don’t think that’s working try something else Sammy said

Wait I know I got it! Tommy took out the silver arrow and the magical chant that the old fox gave them and began reading it out loud. Robby just looked at him with a confused look on his face

Whoa it’s working! He’s starting to shrink back to size

They watched as this cloud surrounded Robby’s body for a few minutes then he walked out like his normal self again

You did it! You guys actually did it! You broke the curse! I don’t know how to thank you!

Oh I know how you can you can make good on your bet me and Sammy will meet you at your dad’s store bright and early tomorrow morning Tommy smiled

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Author's Note

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Reviews

[nimbustime]

The part when the doll came to life after they took his leg really made my skin crawl. The storyline is great. The introduction needs to be shorter and more interesting. Maybe start off with the stealing of the leg. Please work on the punctuation, especially quotes so the reader knows what is dialogue.