drown in deeper dreams

2006

                            steady daylight burns your sleepy eyes

                            makes it hard to see you dreaming

                             always you hide inside yourself

                           sometimes I wonder what your thinking

                            and about everything your chasing

                             it seems to leave you so empty

                             and it won't take long to burn

                           through the nothing you've learned

                            and the things you choose to be

                           all eyes on me, your eyes look away

                               it's so hard to be someone

                                strung out from today

                          all that you know will slip away

                          as you drown in deeper dreams

                              inventing new religions 

                            they smile and stab my back

                               I lie and have to laugh

                            you'll hide in your room 

                               and the light will burn away

                          as you move away from the truth

                               it's all so far from you 

Reviews

[Dahlia Phoenix]

"all that you know will slip away
as you drown in deeper dreams
inventing new religions"

These three lines are memorable by comparison. I love the flow you have at the ending of each sentence bringing dark emotions that capture the reader's interest. Unbelievably superb!

[∂αʌ<..]

" I lie and have to
you'll hide in your room
and the light will burn away
as you move away from the truth
it's all so far from you "

beautiful again Joshua...sometimes your poems struck me so much that i cant put anaything else except beautiful! your poems are just so sensitive sometimes...touched people deep! :)

[Margarette]

The best way to escape from the fear of facing reality will be to tell lies or so it said. Lies make people comfortable but these always damage their reputation. "To drown in deeper dreams", I think, is to cover one's life with lies such that there will come a time where lies are a part of one's life. You have displayed great and wonderful imagery here. I'm glad to have come across such philosophy. Keep writing!

[Canicus]

awesome ending good job keep it up

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

amazing

[Juliet]

"they smile and stab my back
I lie and have to laugh
you'll hide in your room
and the light will burn away
as you move away from the truth
it's all so far from you "

These are my favorite lines. :) Great poem. Well written and not over the top. I like it.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good poem. Open the door to many questions. Better to live a life then to live in dreams and hide away. I like the way you told the poem. A very good ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

[R J Askew]

I liked the sense of distance. 'deeper dreams' and esp 'inventing new religions' was the best part for me. I thought of all the brands we worship when I read religions. And for those who don't worship brands there is always some online distraction to steal us from reality. Well penned.

[Rene Velez]

it reads as a free form, nice visuals of love and truths, well done.

[Ruth]

You know...one of the things I love about your work hon is that it makes me feel as though I am sliding further and further away into such deep emotion when I read you...wanting to hold to something! In a good way....superb work, as always! Hugs xx

[Lily Mae]

Drowning in deeper dreams...man so easy to do and moving all that time further away from self.. Good thing I believe all light prevails or I wouldn't know who looks back at me in the mirror today ;) ..x Excellent write Josh..