back to the disaster

back to the disaster

A Chapter by joshua deathdealer
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2008 (Blood type B: Installment One)

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I am pushed down to face reality
there is no one coming to save me
all of our dreams were lies

your ashes fill the air
dressing myself in sackcloth 
preparing for an age of mourning 
the allotment for this time is over
surrounded by my new alliance with the fallen 
drinking the mortal souls of our enemies
we're burnt out for all the right reasons
given immortality to waste in long seasons
treason is all around, angels are falling down
back to the pills

and the blood

back to the disaster 
life on the grind
it's getting faster


© 2013 joshua deathdealer


Author's Note

joshua deathdealer
This is actually one of my first bloodlust poems. Written in 2008. It's a little different but it was the beginning of the series so I decided to put it in the book as installment one. Thanks everyone for reading..xx

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Oh, that picture is so terrible. It makes me shudder. :) I disagree with Kittie on the lack of emotion. I think it fits the poem. It's bleak, narrated by someone who has given up. It casts a black cloud over the reader as it is read. I really liked the blunt, resigned tone. The only thing that struck me as strange was that the ending stanza rhymed, while the rest of the poem was very free. I mean, the rhymes worked really well, but I wasn't expecting the change. This could apply to any time and many situations, yet it's easy to see how it works with what's happening in today's world. It made me stop and think.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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This is David of the bible all over again He wrote the Psalms before he became King

Posted 12 Years Ago


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vivid imagery, very smooth flow and very personal. :D

Posted 12 Years Ago


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I second (or third) what Coyote said. This piece is clean and to the point, which makes it all the more powerful.

"we're burnt out for all the right reasons
given life to waste in seasons"

That bit is especially haunting.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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We go back to the disaster for sure. It's like drowning in a shallow pond. You keep your face in the water on purpose despite being able to get back up so easily. Deeply disturbing, but awesome nonetheless.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Love this it's quite powerful and wonderful.
Some truth in this as well.
Wonderful write.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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I say Coyote blowed the fish outta the water with his comment and said all that is needed to be said. And pretty hardcore King James bible quote, idk if I'd say it fits the subject of the poem though (but that's all perspective), not much of a bible man myself, but do agree with your meaning.
my CC contribution: well, nobody likes to hear it, nor do I, lol, but grammar is a frequent problem for our kind. mainly my only prob is just take out the second "is" in the second line and you're all good brother (except if this poem is based on a meter, then you will just need to add something in it's place or add to another word in the line). As for anything else, pretty well done bro.
Awesome work though man, really. Claps to you sir, claps to you.

Posted 12 Years Ago


there is no life in this half-life
tear it down

nice write

Posted 12 Years Ago


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I love this...amazin write Joshua

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Little hope in this poem. I do believe the world can be changed. The kids of the sixties and the seventies stop the cold war and Vietnam. The people got tire of the money being wasted. This generation need to take of nature and try to get the world in order. Can happen. I feel the pain of this generation. 40 million on welfare and foolish President will tell us. We are OK. Time to lay-off s****y leaders and start the mess over again. Less government and education is the way. Thank you for a excellent poem. Made me think.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


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