murder death kill

murder death kill

A Chapter by joshua deathdealer
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10/2011 (Blood type B: Installment Five)

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"187"
He spoke nervously into his two way
as he walked up to the lifeless body
that lay twisted on the dirt road.
The gore that surrounded her was
illuminated by his vehicle's headlights.

Looking, he could see that her
throat appeared to have been 
ripped out or cut. Blood still
gushed out the fatal wound,
flowing in the dusty tire tracks.

"187"
"I repeat. I gotta 187, white female
out here on old wire road. It's 
pretty bad. Requesting backup.." the
young policeman says as he turns back 
towards his patrol car. Three feet in 
front of him stood a person.

A man. His clothes were torn and 
he was not seemingly shaken by the 
extreme cold. Unshaven and disheveled.
Blood covered mouth.  "Oh my God" was 
all the rookie managed to say while trying 
to raise his gun.

As he attempts to train his sights, he is 
slammed to the ground. Knocking out his breath.
Flailing around, his arms are pushed back by 
the savage man. He feels the killers teeth sinking 
into his throbbing throat. Pain explodes and
claustrophobia. Causing him to pass out.

Awaking, he realizes the psychopath is 
gulping the red, bubbling flow that pours 
from his neck. Struggling in panic, he pushes 
back at the assailant. The attacker screeches.
Grabs the lawman's head and smashes it repeatedly on 
the lime rock. After licking at the stickiness on his 
fingers the deranged man stands up and walks off 
into the trees.

"235 do you copy. Come in 235"

 


© 2013 joshua deathdealer


Author's Note

joshua deathdealer
I took a different approach to this one. Put more of a story tale style into this fifth installment of the series. Less emotional and more gore. lol

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Wow, this was purely dark and terrorizing. This simple man is calling out for help but instead gets taken down by the killer as well with no hope of his whereabouts being found. In a way, its really sad but in another matter, the description was clarifying what you wanted to point out.

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Loved the gore. It would be hard for any newbie to deal with that. Then he was killed himself. I loved the change in direction as well. Makes it more interesting. I enjoyed reading this. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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The change of direction and style is rather abrupt. I was just starting to get into the gore... Nicely done though

Posted 8 Years Ago


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What a storyline, seems out of the world, J you are a marvellously mysterious story teller.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Savage, fearful and vivid.
The detail of the hunt is superb!

Posted 8 Years Ago


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I like all of your chapters, they give a very inside view of this "being"/vampire/blood drinker.... there is contemplation of the first person narrator, there is evolution in the feelings, and there is thematic imagery.
For some reason though, Murder Death Kill, reveals "a man" as the outside embodiment of the narrator, or is at least suggested. After reading all the installments, I don't see this entity as "just a man" even to a beat cop, with his mind on a gruesome murder. It seems more like this man is just a "copy cat" murderer if you will. In other words, at first and only sight to a revealed conscious of a mortal victim, it is very strange that the narrator is just "a man" I think even ordinary people might sense something more.
Just my take. Nice job on the series of prose.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Ooohhh, got the chills with this one love! I love this series of works actually...this one stands out differently, different stance and chaotic madness amidst thrilling and frightening depths, love it! xoxo

Posted 8 Years Ago


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This narrative reads more like a story, but loses none of its punch for all that. Quite innovative.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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wow that was ....wow

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murder death kill
A Story by joshua deathdealer
Ah, the long forgotten patrol stories are so great. :) I love that her throat was "ripped or cut".
So, the last sentence he's drinking his own blood? O.o Hm, cool. This is outstanding!
O.o I am subscribing.

~S. D. Blankenship

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

creepy and dark I liked it

Posted 8 Years Ago


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