Remember

Sometimes you just have to look in the mirror

“Remember” she reminds herself

Wrap your arms tight around yourself

Wipe the cold tear where you once lay

Release your inner child so she can play


“Remember” says the innocent laugh

Laugh at your hurt only on my behalf

Rebuild block houses you once tore down

Rebaptize in water in your christening gown


Remember your intimate, little rubber room

You were a butterfly stifled, waiting to bloom

You were bruised but your spirit never slain

Oh, little girl, you knew you weren’t insane


Remember me as you glance in the mirror

You’re reborn and there’s no room for error

Meet me under our rainbow as our spirits join again

Come on, it’s time for us to dance and live, my Jenn

Reviews

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

Your writing is always good, and this is no exception. I love this piece, it's a therapuetic type of write. We, as little children, are humble and meek and innocent. what happened to those days? i know sometimes I go; man, i remember when i made frends with anyone, i didn't worry, judge, get parnoid, i was just me, and had fun with life. sometimes we have to embrace ourselves with that young spirit, and be, well, young again.

thank you for writing this. it brought a part of my spirit to see the light, i enjoyed it

kena

[Juan]

Just so you know my brain hurts (in a goodway) thanks for making me use it...Keep writing wonderful poetry and I'll keep using it ;)

[THERISA]

Jenn, your poem speaks volumes to me, as i am trying to live the message of your poem. Sadly, it is one of the hardest spiritual journeys, a person can undertake. Remembering the past is just past and we can move beyond it, into the present and the future. Wishing you well, in that journey. Thanks for sharing this poem with us.

[K. Carver]

Beautifully done. Something about it told me it was about you before I even read your name.

[Kitty]

Wow.. I saw the Spirit of God speaking gently into your spirit and reminding you of a time when things were not so difficult as they seem to be now. And at the same time reminding you that things can be that way again if you just walk with Him..

This is a wonderful write. Inspired by God.

God bless Jenn!!

[JRB]

A child's heart seeking its mind in a land that has passed it by, grabbing at memories stored in flashes of images once held.

[A.r. Bazian]

amazing, appealing, very personal, thank you for sharing!
i love the concept of innocence! the fact (to me) is that we all have ourselves in many stages of our lives locked up in side us!
why cant we just feel it and let ourselves go... let it out... have faith in our selves, the sides of us we never experienced!

take care
keep it up!
*hugs*

[Michael X]

absolutely stunning, heartfelt. soft, and beautifully sentimental, I loved it, particularly the analogies that create the spiritual promising of a brighter future, keep up the brilliant work!

[Marlton]

This captures perfectly that moment I sometimes have in the morning when you're almost surprised at seeing your own face, as if your inner child never aged and never gained the confidence one has as an adult. You get that moment of literal and metaphoric self-reflection perfectly. Good stuff.

[Salvatore Buttaci]

"Remember" holds the poem together without sounding repetitive. I also like the good use of rhyme.