Till Death Do Us Part

A tear moves quietly down her cheek,

Dangling from her chin,

Before falling slowly to the floor.

It is a tear of joy,

Tinted with a gray tear of sorrow.  

She stands before the altar,

Listening as her beloved makes his vows.

Promising her his life and his love,

Till death do us part.

Another tear slips down her face,

She catches her lip between her teeth,

As the words cut her like a blade.

He smiles, and she remembers

The agonizing secret she has kept,

For her death may be sooner than he thinks.

 

Author's Note

This is my first post of anything on here...also one of my first real tries. Please be nice, but I'd love to hear anything to help me improve.

Reviews

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Oh so sweet and yet oh so sad. Very good write, extremely touching, emotional, heart felt. I like this a lot. :)

[Daytonight]

Very good for one of your first tries. You really make us feel the depth of emotion. Keep on penning.

[Brandon]

something that you think would be really happy turns into something dark and sad, totally love that type of thought process.

[Tina Kline]

I like it. Such is the dark shadow on what one would hope would be the happiest day of her life. A very strong and emotional poem.

[MariannaBeavis]

Very beautiful. A powerful blend of emotions in such a short poem.

[Luke Ritta]

Good work!

[Blackwood91]

You just started writing? My, I've been writing twelve years and I honestly find both of your pieces on here very visually powerful. I can see the images you describe. Well done.

[WindSong]

What a twist of fate...didn't expect the ending. It's a wonderful poem with a good rhythm to it. The style is very impressive with a very appealing presentation. Good work! Keep writing!

WindSong

[Lilly Negoi]

i'd say that this is quite a good first post :). you have a very good eye at capturing the essence of scenes. i really like this! well done :).