Come with me

This is a story of a romancer's plea to get the attention of his true love. Please leave comments, any and all are welcome.

Come with me

Just wait and see

A castle with land far and wide

A great accomplishment that I pride

A castle so great and vast

It will take you agast

You will live like a queen

This much I deam

Night will be as great as day

For when your done with fun and play

Then I will show you the skies

And tears will come to your eyes

I'll take you aback with a nice suprise

And give you a shoulder on which to cry

I'll take you in and hold you tight

The world around you will take flight

Dispite all fo the wonder

You will still mike one blunder

As youi decide one day

That you are to run away

But I'll chase after you and say

As my heart cries out loud and true

"I've always loved you

Come back! say 'I do'

You can stay forever

We can stay together

Just wait and see

Come back to me!"

Then your heart will skip a beat

And I'll sweep you off your feet

This time, I'll have a tear in my eye

As I break down and cry

But we'll return to the castle that towers

For inside, are great powers

We will live lifr grand

It will be wonderful and

our hearts will come close and bind

together, in the castle as old as time.

Author's Note

please ignore grammar problems.

Reviews

[Celtic Cat]

this has all the magic of a fairy tale!!! I love it. such a great rhyme scheme and it flowed so well...really kept up it's momentum. You're doing very well!!! There's a few typos (not grammar) you may want to fix, but otherwise it's another gem!!!

[Adiel]

Holliday: Aww, that is so sooo sweet! I wish you guys were together (I guess you do too) This is REALLY good writing btw! I could never do that! The words you used were really cool and it rhymes very well. Good job!
Adiel: I love this peom, its really impressive. You put words in a way that draws the reader in, in a unusual way. You are a talented writer. ..you know i love you. phileo.