The ocean's peace.

My mind, it fails me.
For I remember somethings,
then nothing.
I touch my wounds,
and they ache,
bleed at the slightest touch
of my thoughts,
so they must be physical,
raw, real.

I am made of dreams,
unsafe inside my body,
so I wait for myself,
in the middle of a burning house,
weeping what I cannot say.

I wish I could drown in the ocean
for a little while.

Reviews

[Bhuyanshi Talukdar]

This is a poignant and deeply emotional poem that really captures the feeling of being lost and adrift in the world. I love the way that the you used vivid imagery and rich language to explore the complex emotions and experiences of the speaker, and the way that the poem builds to a climax of emotional intensity is truly breathtaking. The final lines, "I wish I could drown in the ocean / for a little while," are a powerful expression of the speaker's desire to escape from the pain and confusion of their life, and they serve as a poignant reminder of the importance of self-care and self-compassion in times of struggle and difficulty. Overall, I think this is a wonderful piece of writing that will resonate with anyone who has ever felt lost or alone in the world.

[Unspoken poet]

such an emotional piece here, amazing

[Coyote Poetry]

Sometime we feel useless and need to rest. I felt the struggle to escape. Hello dear friend. I hope you are doing well and thank you for sharing your amazing words and your thoughts.
Coyote

[Miss Sharon]

Such a powerful sadness in this write it seems to me. It is well written however. ~Sharon

[Fairy Khan]

Thank you, Sharon.

[John the Baptist]

The one literally leaks pain, a pain which sounds very much like depression. The sense of being in a burning house indicates the approach of a crisis point. If the wish to drown in the ocean had not been accompanied by the disclaimer "for a little while," I would have said it's time to call 911.

[Fairy Khan]

Thank you for reading.

[Cassie]

This is so so sad!! I don't know how to review other than read again.

[Fairy Khan]

Thank you for reading. I really appreciate it.

[emmajoy]

' I am made of dreams - unsafe inside my body - so I wait for myself, - in the middle of a burning house,- -weeping what I cannot say. '

Your words are dramatic, extreme and near terrifying. You have expressed what most would fear but somehow. via true expression, you show defiance. How? To even consider drowning in the ocean - albeit it is acknowledging a means of recovery... yes? What fine writing.

[Fairy Khan]

For me resilience is the key, but the means of being resilient are defiance and hope, above all. To drown in the ocean signifies being peaceful, recovering and or just feeling numb to all the pain. It can be different for different people.
Thank you for reading. You are so kind.

[emmajoy]

I'm all for touches of defiance.. it's that of curl up and face the wall. Maybe wrong but.. think we agree.

[Fairy Khan]

Surely, we do. :)

[Chris Shaw]

In the middle of a burning hiuse
Weeping what I can not say

How sorrowful this poem is Fairy. Your feelings conveyed so well.

Chris

[Fairy Khan]

Many thank yous Chris. I hope you are doing great.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love the last two lines...drown for a little while...but then come back....sort of like Sylvia Plath, I would say.
This poem is raw and real and a burning house in itself.
nicely done, Fairy,
j.

[Fairy Khan]

Thank you for reading, J.

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

The sorrow of this poem touches me, for it speaks to things I myself experience at times. Thank you for sharing your work.

[Fairy Khan]

That's the thing about sorrow, it touches everyone. Thank for reading.