Fever.

Just something more simple than I normally write.

His eyes pierced mine, sudden and still,

His fingers touching skin so tight,

His hands caressing my bossom strong,

His embrace so soft and fiercly tight.

 

I tremble at the glance to his face,

I crumble under his feverish passion,

I live for that singular explosion,

I surrender to him after a fashion.

 

We hold each other when mid force,

We dream of the quiet release to come,

We wish even hope to stay entwined,

We slave to our own emotions some.

Author's Note

Honesty!

Reviews

[Jack Isaac]

Begins with third person, nice. Addresses the first person next, and then first person plural... we. That says more than anyone knows, perhaps more than anyone wants to know, but this write says it well, and gloriously concludes in the last two lines.. that which is hoped and that which cannot be helped. Nicely done.

[freelancejouster]

i'm not such a fan of the beating repetition and i never am, but here it almost works for me. i like the fierceness in this, the rawness and simplicity. there's nothing meek about it.

[Little Birdie]

I love the emphasis you put on the third person and after that first person and then you just write it as "we"...it gives an unique sense of bonding and unity beyond what I can read, borderlining on what is left to imagination. I love how the passion is written and felt in every word. And regarding to the name of the poem itself - some fevers are just so deep under our skin, we can never sweat them out. Great work.

[Ethan Paz]

I love how you change the person in each stanza. Of course, since I have a girlfriend, I am biased and do love this poem. Love poems are always a winner to a couple since it appeals to the flesh. Not only is it good, but the words you used-- "caressing, bossom, (using soft with tight), feverish passion"-- were excellent. I enjoyed reading this selection keep it up, Thomas.

[Crystal Marie Dreier]

This piece shows so much emotion. I love your work and would recomend people to read it.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Very sensual...
terrific!!

[Joshua David Vrana]

aww, now i miss my girlfriend!!!

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

Beautifully penned and touching piece. Nicely done!

[isasi]

loved the last paragraph.

[?]

Simple it may be from your norm...but a most beautiful piece filled with such passion.
Wonderful write

[Raven Starhawk]

Such a amazing read. I am at a lost for words.