A Night To Remember

inspired after reading fireworks and bitemarks by spilled her guts in cursive. amazing poetry btw jackie <3

I look a state.
Heavy lidded eyes and
Red tint purple bruises,
Smudged eyeliner with
Swollen lips and trembling knees.

But, oh my god, you are absolutely
Totally

Undeniably

Beautiful.

The brown of your eyes drinking me in
As if I were a shimmering oasis of freedom, in the desert of our restrictions.
Crimson indentations carved - shallow grooves, but still - into the strong forearms
Scratches decorating every inch of your skin
Skin which entices me, drawing me in

With each rattling breath, I give myself to you utterly

Completely

Forever

Always.

 

In every single mirror, I see you.
Your disappointed irises are reflected in my dilated pupils, when I know I've done wrong.
In every thought process, I hear you.
Sweet melodies which whisper to me, more gentle than a slight breeze whipping softly between piles of autumn leaves.
In every second, I miss you.
 

 

 

 

I don't just want you anymore, I need you
I am drowning in the deep, my spirit now feels weak
I have no desire for sleep,
Your scent I wish to, forever keep,
Memories sprint too fast away,
Oh what I would do, to return to yesterday.

 

Reviews

[Donovan "Grey Wolf" Go..]

wow that was good.

[Secondhand Tink]

Ohhh myyy I have to review this again Kirsty I am very sorry...

BUT

The changes are positively fantastic, I got shivers, the descriptions, utterly perfect I could just imagine it all so well and I went all funny!!

I love the bits of single words in italics e.g. 'snake' that was sexy :)

[Secondhand Tink]

AHH I LOVE THE NEW STANZA EPIC EPIC EPIC.

:DDDD

YOU ARE TRULY AWESOME AND I BOW DOWN AT YOUR AWESOMENESS.

-worships-

[Secondhand Tink]

Again, as jackie said: WOW.

I completely felt every word like little stabs, it was beautiful dearest.

I LOVE the last stanza, it stands out so much from the rest and just works so very well.

Loved it all, excellent, perfect, fabulous write

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[Spilled Her Guts in Cur..]

wow....that was gorgeous.

"With each rattling breath, I give myself to you utterly"

I especially loved that line. amazing