less than the best of me

durable times like these
strangle all inward pleas
for insight to evoke
or passion to emote
what would be worthy we.
I fail myself, reader,
and lose pride as writer--
I'm pitiful, I grieve--
monkeys' grunts have more voice
than any word of my choice.
 

Author's Note

This was the first piece of writing I published here at writerscafe.org; it was the feeling I encountered while I searched within myself for something which might produce powerful profundity and was simply and plainly unable.

Reviews

[Brandon]

Nicely done man.

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

A wonderful undertaking to explain just what we as writers feel many times a day I must say - at least for me this rings True. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha

[Morgan A Lynch]

the lack of words and you came up with this.. only if i could have days like that..

[Imperfection]

I enjoyed this one very much.
Excellent choice of words.
I don't think even the monkey would agree with the last two lines.

[Catrinka]

I really like this one - your message is clear, you use very original words - good work!

[yinseriv]

Kudos! What an evocative poem. You brought right into the words and allowed me to see me within. Good work!

[Angel Bird]

Oooohhh you wonderfully clothed into words what it feels like to have a head full of the greatest words and not to find those that would fit the empty sheet of paper which stares into your face, and longs for your pen to finaly move.

Every word-addict knows what you are talking about.
This is very well done. Nice poetic touch. I really like it. Thumb up!

[AlleyCat34]

Nice job with this! It flows nicely and pulls us readers along... but dEj is right, no matter how hard we try we dont stand a snowballs chance in ---- of pleasing every one that reads our writing! Great Job! Ill be back to pop in on you again!

[dEj]

Very Nice.... but remember that we never will please all, we shall with earnest effort and pleasure please some always, but we never really fail as we discover and reveal each our own genius!

Looking forward to reading much more from you.

namaste, david

[Kara Emily Krantz]

oh man. haven't we been there?? lol definitely. i'm sure many of us here can relate to this... the humor that you added at the end was really well-placed. i love that line, too "i fail my reader" - never really looked at it that way, but how true! i've wondered why sometimes i've felt so helpless, unable to find my voice, and why that bothered me so much. it's not just becuase we can't write ourselves, but also because we DO feel that way - like we're failing the reader, even the reader we don't have. great write. :)