Hell Hath No Fury

A relationship gone wrong....

Oh, what glorious temptation I have found!

Lips that taste of nectars the Gods have yet to find

Eyes that hold more passion than a thousand fires in Hell

You make me feel so combustible

Your touch is hell-bent on devouring my soul

Patience love, I’m sure I’ll let you have ALL of me

To be near you is like being lifted into the Heavens

But I should have known, you are no angel

You’ve shown your true face, spawned from the fires of Hell

Your grand and delicious delusions are set out to convince me I’ve gone mad

Your acrid breath drips down my face

I can’t help but shudder and repress a scream as I try to escape

But your hands slip around my neck like a noose

I love the way your hands feel on my flesh even as I can feel the bones begin to crack

Death rushes in as time runs out

My sudden anger is righteous and I am just

A dark and dangerous temptation, breeding lust and false hope no more

I may be the one on the floor, but you can GET OUT the door!

Oh dear God, What have I done?

I was foolish to think that I could win.

My life means little when the Devil just killed my unborn child

Eyes hold more tears than a thousand suns

Many storms beneath the surface rage

I swear, you’ll pay for what you’ve done

You could’ve had me completely

But you messed with the wrong heart

Now you’ll spend a lifetime always looking over your shoulder

Because your carelessness prompted me to ignite

Remember, wherever you go……..

 

Hell hath no fury like a woman scorned

Author's Note

A little different from my other stuff. Thanks for reading and reviewing just the same :)

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"Death rushes in as time runs out
My sudden anger is righteous and I am just
A dark and dangerous temptation, breeding lust and false hope no more
I may be the one on the floor"
Wow. That is some good poetry. My faves in this well written poem...:)

[Kristin Lee]

Thank you

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:)

[Angi]

Let me always be on your good side! Had me on the edge of my seat!

[Kristin Lee]

Ha ha, I really have more bark than bite. I promise :) I'm glad you liked it though.

[Jack...]

very cool. I like the reversing line fire and ice to ice and fire. Nice touch. This screams loudly from the screen. Very cool indeed.

[Kristin Lee]

I'm batting 50/50 with that one, lol. I was striving to show the fluctuation of feelings. How one ranges between desire and fear when faced with such a difficult situation. But upon revision I'm not certain it's necessary...

www.kristinllee.wordpress.com

My revised copy is posted here. I'd be interested to see what you think....

[Jack...]

I like I, I like the flow without the red and blue fire and ice, though I did like it in the original, in the revised, without it the poem seems more serious and desperate. So I do like the revised a little better than the original.

[Kristin Lee]

That's seems to be the consensus. Thanks! :)

[icelandicblue]

A deal with the devil only ends well for the devil. You can be burnt with fire and ice- there is always a price to pay. Nice one.

[Kristin Lee]

Ah, tis very true. The Devil is cunning. Both fire and ice burn. And everything comes with a price.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Remind me NEVER to cross you. This is written with such flowing passion and its progression from lust and desire to anger and revenge is very well described. I wondered if the repeating of Fire and Ice, ice and Fire added much value?

[Kristin Lee]

Ha ha. I think retribution some times ends up being dished out upon our own hearts instead of the monsters who caused us pain to begin with. But that's topic for another time. The only one who got hurt in the end was me. a murderer walked away free and clear...that's why he's the Devil.

I agree with the fire and ice comment. I actually posted it on my blog without the repetative fire and ice and I like the visual dynamics and the overall flow much better. Thanks for the suggestion! www.kristinllee.wordpress.com if your interested in checking it out.