A SPIRIT PARADE

06 06 04 - 05 10 11

downtown
tourist town
root stew

selves sought out in a land
where no one fully lives

the main street sidewalk
a spirit parade
infinite

yet the way to work evolves
like a burning candle
the superimposition of new faces
onto old

a demographic almanac of movement

Author's Note

Second published piece :) (Miracle E-zine, Issue 3)

Reviews

[∠( ᐛ 」..]

Wow, this really has a nice flow and wise words. I love it :)
The ending was amazing too, I really enjoyed this. My favorite line was " the main street sidewalk, a spirit parade ,infinite" the best line ever :D
Great work!
Thanks for sharing! ^_^
100/100

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much :D

[Renée]

You paint a picture in this one K… as I read, it comes to life, as a town that sustains itself on tourism.. I love the talk of a "spirit parade".. with the title I was expecting a spooky write..but was pleasantly surprised to see it was in reference to the ever changing faces, which includes the shop workers..
Very Nice work !

[kublakhan27]

So glad you liked this one Renee...I spent four months working in a tourist town, and I wrote this on my last day there, in the airport, waiting for my plane :)

[Renée]

Very Cool ! I love seeing places though others eyes… it is fun to observe, and feel the energy surrounding different towns and countries.

[That_Girl]

I didn't need a dictionary for this one. Either I'm getting smarter or you've given me a break. ;p

kidding

Anyways, I love it. I love living in the city, but I hate tourist parts. Tourists look at things like they're foreign, including the people lol

[kublakhan27]

Haha well this is an oldie now but I have been trying to get back to this style...it's a bit more universal and not so self-indulgent ;P

The four months I spent in this town were the best four months of my life (Banff, Alberta, which is smack dab in the middle of the Rockies so it's completely surrounded by huge mountains...unbelievable scenery) though I know what you mean about tourists being weird lol This is actually a milestone piece...it's the first one I actually showed off to others after keeping it all to myself for a couple of years...the response I got gave me an inkling that I might be on to something ;) Anyways that includes my memoir for today...glad you like it :)

[That_Girl]

Hahaha never self indulgent, just far more intelligent than the rest of us is all. :p

I've never been to Canada at all... nature and cold don't really agree with me lol. But I've seen pictures and it is gorgeous. :D

[kublakhan27]

Haha Well I read a lot but I wouldn't equate that with intelligence :P Actually not all of Canada is cold though a good bit of it is at different points of the year...the west is the worst though and I'm really glad I'm not there lol There is all kinds of different scenery though :D

[That_Girl]

The west is the worst?! Wow.. would have never guessed that. Hm. Someday I'll take a trip up. :)

[kublakhan27]

Oh yeah, your skin can freeze out west...literally lol But it's nice :)

[Castonovia]

Lovely piece indeed with civilization as the key... the city, oh, and almanac of movement... splendid word usage. Glad it's published. You definitely deserve it :)

[kublakhan27]

Thanks very much :D

[Castonovia]

No prob ;)

[Westminster Abbey]

It's amazing how people follow the same pattern every day, never daring to deviate from the norm... Great write! 100/100

[kublakhan27]

Thank you :D (The weird thing is that there were always different people coming in and out of town to work but they all seemed to follow the same routines unwittingly)

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAutho..]

"...yet the way to work evolves like a burning candle" - I didn't get it at first. I was going to give you some crap about it too. Then I saw it was "published" (congratulations by the way) and then reread it - and it hit me. Or at least something whacked me and said, inside my head, "Perhaps he means it literally you numbskull. It (the way to work) melts into a smokey, sooty, drippy mess; like waxy puddles. A candle of humanity, of civilization rendering its token flame in the name of the movement dujour." "Oh. OK!", I sez to myself. Not bad. Not bad at all. :o)

[kublakhan27]

Haha that's not a bad assessment actually...glad you like it :)

[Androglossia]

selves sought out in a land
where no one fully lives

I can imagine. You're from Canada, right? Your country is swarmed by thousands of people, even millions (who knows?) from all over the world. Especially Asians (lol, i'm gonna get there someday adding the population). My relatives and some of my friends are even there and more to come:) This piece tells a geologic phenomena of an entire state. Published. Wow, what can I say?

[kublakhan27]

I am indeed from Canada and there are about 30 million people here last I heard...it is definitely a melting pot as we seem to have sizable pockets of every nationality scattered throughout the country (including a number of Asian localities ;)) Maybe we'll make it to each other's homeland sometime lol

This is written in a tourist town where I was working for the summer...you rarely saw the same faces twice lol I never considered this one to be a strong candidate for publication but you never know when you've got a hit I guess lol

[Androglossia]

That would be wonderful. I got a lot of relatives in Montreal. I know it's another state but at least it's not a continent apart, lol.

I agree. At some point, less is more:)

[kublakhan27]

Montreal? One of my closest friends lives there :) For the life of me I cannot write pieces this short unless they the whole thing comes at once...I think I did this one in ten minutes, when it usually takes me that long to settle on an adjective :P

[Androglossia]

Yep, Montreal. It's not so hard get to CA compared to Europe or the US of A. I mean the application for the US is more complicated. Idk why.

And 10 mins for this short a piece? No kidding! It's like telling me you're perfectionist. Clandestine only took me less than 5 minutes. No wonder you're getting bublished:)

[kublakhan27]

Haha yeah it's always been easier to get into Canada than most other places...it's part of our identity I suppose :P I'm certainly a perfectionist haha Of course I've often fallen into the trap of over-thinking things sometimes, not just with regards to writing but everything...it's one of those issues I've had to tend to in recent years...I guess it was worth it in this case though :)

[Androglossia]

In writing? Yeah I guess it's worth it, I've seen it myself. Your writings are slowly getting to where they should be. Awww Mr. Perfectionist! Did you know that perfectionist are most likely to not get married? Are we going to see each other at the end of the rainbow because you are perfectionist and I'm gay? LMAO

[Damien Davison]

Very unique and captivating. Such a refreshing style, it's exciting to read these unique pieces. You have an interesting mind, thank you for sharing!

[kublakhan27]

Thank you, I appreciate it :)

[B-poet]

This is short, sweet, and to the point. It sheds light on the revolving door of life's transitional pace as it relates to human beings. Great work. :)

[kublakhan27]

Haha yeah I pretty much experienced that in 3-D working in a tourist town so this one came to me unnaturally quick...I'm glad you like it, and that I was able to get that feeling across :)

[Abdul Batin Osman Bey]

sweet poem,the imagery is unique because of the subject matter of time gone by places. Really cool write.
again with the numbers hidden meaning? How about Equality in Culture gains you Power to use your Wisdom to set the still sleeping Free.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks very much, I really had to live this one before I could write it lol Do you mean the numbers below the title? They're dates: the dates on which I finished the first version and this one. I do have an obsession of sorts with numerology though so I tend to date everything and see if I find any patterns...and I have found some things in the past lol

[Abdul Batin Osman Bey]

Oh I didn't realize they were dates I just kept looking at them trying to figure them out so I used Supreme Mathematics to come up with my line. Numerology is an interesting subject, I know a little bit about it but nothing too deep. Maybe you could write a poem about it, just an idea.

[kublakhan27]

Truth be told, I do present them that way as a means of adding a touch of mystery to whatever I write lol I would indeed like to write something about it in the future, but it has to be one of those things that writes itself^^

[Lehlohonolo Lichaba]

awesome write you never disappoint

[kublakhan27]

Thanks very much^^