TWO POETS AND THE RAIN (Collab with Melobldnfr)

TWO POETS AND THE RAIN (Collab with Melobldnfr)

A Poem by kublakhan27
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A game implies a winner,

Which in turn implies an end.

Yet the players in this pulsing

Game of heart monopoly

Remain relentless in their quest

To win in perpetuity.

Tonight we take back the rule book.

Two poets and the rain

Will compose a requiem for hurt

And part our lips to emulate

The firmament's torrent of

A life story's tears.

Your head in my lap,

I run my fingers through your hair.

I want to take every tear

To be your ink and page.

I rummage through your pain.

Let it not make me sway.

I hurt with you, but take it,

Disengage it, and honorably stay.

My shoulders are big enough

To play upon your stage.

Let the crickets sing

Something akin to our names,

And try to not let the doors slam

With our windows from their panes.

A night like tonight, I encourage

You to exorcise your eyes

So eroded from the salt of

Drama's stinging weight.

Lay your notebook next to mine.

Out we'll run into the holy rivulets

Of the heavens.

When you smile we'll retreat

To the humanity of home,

Struck by a inkling to test

Each others' senses.

A night like tonight, I reach out.

You, who's felt more in my words,

Hear my whispered shouts.

Take my cup, make it yours.

I'll be your downpour

But not your fall.


 

© 2013 kublakhan27


Author's Note

kublakhan27
Don't forget to visit Mel, she's a very soulful writer who doesn't get as much attention as she should. We had a lot of fun with this, it took about a week to put together. She picked the artwork as well :)

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Beautiful, and a stunning collab!! I love it all, but particularly the last -"I'll be your downpour, but not your fall". I am not familiar enough with either of you to know which part is yours, and which belongs to Mel but the two of you mesh in a fashion that makes it difficult to determine where the dividing line is -and that to me is a successful collab!


Posted 6 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

We did work very hard at weaving and mixing our lines so that even those who knew us would not be ab.. read more
Melobldnfr

6 Years Ago

Thank you Sheila.



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very attractive lines, your comparisons and images are highly qualitative and enjoyed them well
all the best, sayed thangal

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

Thank you for the kind words Sayed, much appreciated.
you soulful sprout of wisdom and passion in one body of words. you continue to be one of my favorite wordless stones. This is a very well-written tale of pure love and intimacy that i can't even compare to.Although, i can relate to it.

I apologize for not being on here lately and that i have reviewed not sosoon. i am a very busy woman. haha


I'm still looking for compatible publishers and submitting unto magazines. But you, my frind, never fail. this is a lovely piece Kubby

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

Thank you my dear, I'm glad you enjoyed it and were able to relate to it. That's okay about being b.. read more
Kleio13

6 Years Ago

I am. Thanx for the support Kubby. I'm performing poetry tonight
kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

Always a pleasure bud. Very cool that you're reading tonight...good luck if I haven't missed you ha.. read more
Wow, simply stunning. The word choice is so Mel but the arrangement is kublakhan27. I can really see two personalities here, or shall we call it style. And I can say that it worked perfectly well. I know that because I am very familiar with both your works. It's surprising to see a great collab from my two good friends :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Mary Ann M.

6 Years Ago

can I let *
Melobldnfr

6 Years Ago

Just when I didn't think I could grin any wider! :-D
Mary Ann M.

6 Years Ago

* _ ^
An epic & marvelous masterpiece between the both of you. A seamlessly flawless work of written art by two uniquely talented poets. Great work again you two. A compelling read. :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

Thank you my friend, we spent a long time rewriting and reworking this piece to a point where it flo.. read more
Beautiful, and a stunning collab!! I love it all, but particularly the last -"I'll be your downpour, but not your fall". I am not familiar enough with either of you to know which part is yours, and which belongs to Mel but the two of you mesh in a fashion that makes it difficult to determine where the dividing line is -and that to me is a successful collab!


Posted 6 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

We did work very hard at weaving and mixing our lines so that even those who knew us would not be ab.. read more
Melobldnfr

6 Years Ago

Thank you Sheila.
What a gorgeous collab! Passionate and full of poise. Every word demanding the readers attention:




A night like tonight, I encourage

You to exorcise your eyes

So eroded from the salt of

Drama's stinging weight.

Lay your notebook next to mine.

Out we'll run into the holy rivulets

Of the heavens.

Will there be another collab? Two talents create twice the intrigue. Bravo!

Posted 6 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

We actually haven't talked about the possibility of an encore but I'm sure we will sometime. So gla.. read more
Melobldnfr

6 Years Ago

Yes, thank you so much. Super glad to see your review!
You both definitely have writing chemistry! I'll be sure to check her out since I love this little preview of her work so much. I loved the aspect of partnership and harmony. To be there for each other hand help one another reach our goals in this endless game of life...

A well-deserved 100/100 :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

Thanks so much Nora, that means a lot :) She is definitely worth checking out, and doesn't get near .. read more
Melobldnfr

6 Years Ago

Ya'll are too sweet. Thank you.
very nice & romantic imagery. beautifully written

Posted 6 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

Glad you enjoyed it, thank you Marion^^
Mizo4

6 Years Ago

no problemo, have a good day
This was a gorgeous poem and you both did wonderful. xo Winter

Posted 6 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

6 Years Ago

Glad you enjoyed it, thank you Winter^^

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Nova Scotia, Canada



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