BLATANT IRONY THIS TIME

02 15 14

I talk myself
into the consideration that
anyone inclined to do so
could talk themselves into
a straitjacket patchwork of
doldrums
impervious to the overruling
of the snow by the Sun

I'm so good at what I do
that I swear I've talked
my own shadow into
hovering solo
just as I was conjuring
the confidence to tickle
my living room floor
with shadow dancing
undisturbed by the absurdity
of self-contained flattery

Nonetheless I laugh
uncontested by the silence
but only Narcissism deniers
like the sound of their own voice
and so my laugh
sounds like a sneer
as I fail to forgive
my own shadow
for making a wall
flower of me

Author's Note

Reviews

[K.N. Lorenzen]

I really like this piece ! The unique imagery and the cynical, brutal self-irony. It seems trustworthy and honest, without being pathetic or "pure" confession. I hope I have complimented your skills before!
Thanks for the turbulent, poetically brilliant ride.

K.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much K, your kind words are a huge confidence booster, and much appreciated :)

[K.N. Lorenzen]

We all need those sometimes :) and your work certainly deserves the credit.

[KAOlmsted]

Told ya. You're the best writer on this site and everyone knows it ;-p Well...I know it and that really should be enough for you xD

xoxo

[kublakhan27]

It means more than I can put into words my dear friend...thanks so much for the support, it means the world :) xoxo

[KAOlmsted]

You deserve every accolade. xoxo

[redflutterby]

If Kimmer says it there's no doubt!! But i'll second it just for emphasis!! You're brilliant Steve!! x

[kublakhan27]

Haha Thanks so much girls, I am truly humbled :) xo

[Kenneth The Poet]

A greatly cutting piece, KK. You rock at this stuff.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Kenneth, I always appreciate your kind words.

[Pryde Foltz]

I talk myself
into the consideration that
anyone inclined to do so
could talk themselves into
a straitjacket patchwork of
doldrums
impervious to the overruling
of the snow by the Sun

The witticism and vulnerability in this is sublime.

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it Pryde, thank you.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i love this...no matter how much we inflate our own ego, we really know better...

even the shadow doesn't want to stay with us, it is shaking its head....it is appalled at how much we can love ourselves. i have been in this straitjacket before...

and didn't feel very strait...my emotions just drained...bouncing off rubber walls in a white room.

[kublakhan27]

Sometimes it feels like there's no one else to love, then the shadow departs, and there isn't. Thanks so much Jacob.

[Relic]

Everything Frieda and the others said. Excellent poem.

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it Relic, many thanks for the kind words.

[Relic]

My pleasure.

[Frieda P]

Holy cats Benji! Love the ironic compulsion here, so many great lines. Where does this worldview end and the twisted paradox begin? I need to see your shadow within the confines of your poetry is all I know. Your abstract voice can't be paralleled, you ascend and descend, never screw around in the middle. If this is irony, then I'm all in for the mystery, sign me up to your enigma'd world my sweet friend. xo

[kublakhan27]

Aaaaarrrrrrrrrrghhhhhhhh...I wrote a long response to your review Mrs.R, that I took my time working on, and my lousy connection erased it...what a day...so let me try this again. I was genuinely moved by your words and sentiments here...you don't know how bad I needed a positive response for this piece...I'm so glad you understood where I'm coming from here...thank you so much. My original response was better, but you get the idea :) xo

[icelandicblue]

I'm so good at what I do
that I swear I've talked
my own shadow into
hovering solo

Now that is a trick I would pay to see. I like the tongue-in-cheek feeling of this one.

[kublakhan27]

Haha Thank you as always Ice..my humour is still being very much forced but I'm glad it did come through a bit.

[A. Amos]

but only Narcissism deniers
like the sound of my own voice
and so my laugh
sounds like a sneer
as I fail to forgive
my own shadow
for making a wall
flower of me

Another great write KK, simply splendid piece of work..........truly enjoyed the read and the song

[kublakhan27]

Many thanks A, I always appreciate your support :)

[A. Amos]

You're most welcome and support is always there be sure about that.....