QUARTER PAST SUBMISSION'S SWAN SONG (A FREIDA/KUBLA COLLAB)

06 26 14

Rendezvous with a rhyme
quarter to submission
sands passing seasons insanity
sifting through the looking glass
kaleidoscopic views of envisioned ingenuity
invented of shrewd clock's cleverness
dead stop in muse's fluidity
ticking shock in witless rhythm's time
Poesy's autopilot keeps track of
those who do and don't mind the fixes
Nestled in the stresses is a game of
hourglass hopscotch
Muse and fate concoct a blind date
Empty inspiration left to oscillate
in a black hole of huddled machinations
Strum the oracle of obvious aubades
Beat the path to a slaughtered pulp
Yeasty promises grow plump on record
like a sunrise
daring eyes to disclose the off-white lies
wing and a prayer flew the coop
dumpster diving for assimilated grace
inhaled within consumption's simile
devouring an exhaustive cadence
iambic pentameter humming Hallelujah 
requesting additional expenditures
darkly stares spoke out of turn
reimbursed in a slighted slug fest
Phallacy too close for comfort
to an organic pink compass
Truth drowning in a cold bath
sings out like a swan
channeling ambitious Leda
and the dynasty of awkward accountability

Author's Note

We're back ;)

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"muse and fate concoct a blind date"

love it, and how true that is...a collision of spirit and words...time and poetry..

and you two collide with a great fluidity...your words seem as one voice...

I like awkward accountability...sort of like okay here are my words...I wrote them, whether they are truth or not, I don't know..but I take responsibility...I might have sheltered my emotions, covered them up or just outright spewed them honestly on the page..
but who knows..i am not sure myself.

[kublakhan27]

I can relate to those feelings when I'm writing on my own and Freida may relate as well...thank you Jacob.

[Frieda P]

I concur...poetic injustice perhaps, we never know how our words will be perceived. Thanks jacob.

[Shirlena]

Looks like the dynamic duo keeps doing it to death. Ya'll know ya'll can turn a phrase whether you are together or separate.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you my friend...I think we're taking a breather after doing two in a week, which is definitely doing it to death by our standards :P We'll be back though...thanks so much for the support as always.

[Shirlena]

Happy to support good scribing Ku :).

[Sheila Kline]

Interpretation of any poem is "in the mind of the reader", and I must be asleep on this one as I can't tell where either writer of this collab begins or ends. We may interpret it in a myriad of ways and that is what some readers want and some writers diligently work to achieve. Who is to say what lines in a poem actually say when the writer may mean something entirely different than the reader interprets. I refer back to my review of Frieda's poem, "Poetic Injustice".
The two of you are genius together, flawless seams of creativity!

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much my friend...it is a joy to know that our works are so entertaining and challenging...we challenge each other a lot too ;) I honestly cannot articulate how much it means...I'll be sure to pass the kind words to Frieda as well, I know she'll be jazzed :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Holy smokes!!

You two are a force to be reckoned with...

I cannot tell you how many times I read this... it's a maze of words leading me down the rabbit hole...

With poetry being front and center to your theme, you allow the reader to go on a surreal journey... so much to grasp and decipher...

This is daring, and you both pulled it off Magnificently!~xoxo~:)

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much my dear friend, I don't have the words to express how much that means...I will show this to Frieda, I'm sure she agrees :) xoxo

[Frieda P]

Wow, doing the happy dance, thanks muchly Robbie! xo :)

[Rita L. Sev]

"Muse and fate concoct a blind date..." I think these words express the process perfectly. The Poet blindly follows the Muse wherever she leads, for better or for worse... fortunately when you two join forces, it is always for the better! Your Muses dance together so well, Frieda and Steve!

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Rita, it makes my day when people compliment our works in this way, and I know Frieda feels the same :)

[Frieda P]

My favorite line too Rita, it's Benji :)

[Lydia Shutter]

Sometimes the word write themselves and though they are posted under the poet's name, well, who can say who is truly responisible? Does the muse conjure them and then whisper them in our ears? When I taught poetry, I told students, "Once the words are on the page, the interpretation belongs to the reader, not the poet." As long as your readers take away some meaning, you have done a good job, Steve....and never doubt it, you DO a great job! Take responsibility....the words are divine. Lydi**

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much my friend, but I owe a great deal to Freida who co-wrote this one with me and provided many of the best lines...I totally agree with your advice, I've always felt that way, and I'm always puzzled when someone asks me what I was thinking when I wrote something haha So glad you enjoyed it :)

[Lydia Shutter]

Sorry I did not notice the fact it was a collaboration! The two of you blend lines so well, it was seamless!

[kublakhan27]

Thanks again my friend :)

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Lydikey.

[Einstein Noodle]

i always have read and re-read your stuff Freida .. i want to glean every little stitch of innuendo .. this is no exception ...
i agree with all .. it is written as from one .. nice job!

"Muse and fate concoct a blind date
Empty inspiration left to oscillate" ... especially like those lines

E.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Einstein :)

[Frieda P]

Those are the genius' Dali lines....glad you enjoyed our madness E....! My favorite line too....

[Frontier]

"Muse and fate concoct a blind date
Empty inspiration left to oscillate
in a black hole of huddled machinations"- I really liked this part, seems to me to talk about the writing "process" or in any type of creating activity.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Frontier...I think that's one of the things we had in mind but there were many more.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Frontier.

[Lyn Anderson]

I love the very last line. I like how you two work together, it is very seamless. Amazing. I wish I was a better collaborator. I just never learned to cooperate, it isn't my strong suit.

[kublakhan27]

Glad you enjoyed it K...I don't think it's my strong suit either but Frieda and I just have very good chemistry :)

[Frieda P]

Ha I make him do it, he has no choice, he can't refuse Mrs R ;)

[kublakhan27]

Haha No I can't...I guess she knows that it would take me a month if it tried doing this myself ;)

[Frieda P]

Hey this one was record time, stop whinging Benji ;P x

[kublakhan27]

Haha I don't you don't like to be left waiting Mrs.R ;P x

[Frieda P]

Laughing here, are you calling me a pushy biatch Benji? Yeah, patience is hardly one of my virtues ;) MWAH! x

[kublakhan27]

Haha I'm not calling you that Mrs.R...demanding is more like it, but I may never write without it ;) MWAH x (Poor K is getting a lot more feedback than she wanted I think haha)

[Frieda P]

What the hey, give her more to edit.....!

[Troy Henson]

Great job you two! This had a flow to it that was seamless. Filled with meaning and truth. Absolute gem this was to read.
Thank you

Kind Regards
Troy

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it Troy, thank you :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks muchly Troy, truly appreciate your words.