TOMORROW IS ANOTHER SOMETHING

08 22 14

My waking is a walk into
a destitute daydream
blindfolded by the sun's embroidery
of Scarlett redundancy 
Another day of self-fulfilling fiction
siphoned through decisive shutters
swallowing deflated social bait
with arid straws of filtered daylight
mocking optimistic fabrications of
a rippled audience
with the benign transcendent
therapy of your angelic quintessence
A woman lurks in your impression
of a knighting manifestation
on my shoulders sulking under
solitude's weight
yet the sword of your anointing revelation
isn't flat and flush with the descending
contours of my collarbones
On my shoulders I collect
the clammy pools of blood culled
from a reality's severing duet
From my body falls all aptitude
for sensitivity to apathy
and between decapitation and the day
acceptance is adopted with a sigh
of relativity
You saved me from a death
by disregarded hours
and released me to another day
alone but alive

Author's Note

I tried to write a love poem. This is what happens when I try to write a love poem.

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

awwwwww... I LOVE this song... soooo dang sweet... I am seriously singing along and smiling right now.. oh my gawd... thank you for that... my spirit is dancing happily with your deep, meaning words... this is.... wow... ok.. the poem.... it is layered, but the sparkly rays of sweet sentiment are sprinkled throughout..
you know I get where you are coming from and can relate on so many levels.. alive is a start sir.. it is actually, a damn good start... alone is fixable... some of us are only a click or text away... ((hugs) to you my friend.. what a lovely piece..

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed the song April, it's a favourite of mine as well :) And of course I'm even gladder that you enjoyed the poem...I'm smiling knowing that you're smiling too :) Yes, you always do know where I'm coming from my friend, and I'm thankful beyond words for that...whenever I'm depressed, which is most of the time, my mother tells me just to be happy and thankful that I'm alive...such a simple and sensible piece of advice, yet so hard for me to wrap my mind around at times...I'm starting to get more comfortable with that belief as I get older, but it's hardly a be-all-and-end-all remedy...then again I wonder if I'd ever write if I were simply content with being alive...anyways I'm going off the rails now haha You know how much your friendship and support mean to me my friend, and I'll never feel alone as long as I have it...so glad you enjoyed this piece, and I hope you're doing okay today...you know I worry about you :) ((hugs))

[AprilRN1210]

never a remedy in the matters of the head and the heart like that my friend... (just saying)... well, then looks like you won't feel alone then, cause have it you do... I am as well as can be expected.. one moment at a time.. thank you..

[kublakhan27]

Thanks again my friend, I'll be checking in on you from time to time :)

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

What a beautiful piece. It really captures the readers eye. :)

[Pete Langley]

I remember the warm, embracing feeling this song gave me - as a confused and hormonal seventeen-year -old ensconced alone with his Dansette record player for hours, contemplating the prospect of yet another timid prospecting expedition to the Locarno dancehall....and the probable failure of my chat-up technique once again.
But then I could - and would - escape again.....and still do. Love your poem, Steve. P.

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

This poem is amazing.....and this song is my favourite...after reading your poem....i listened to the song once more and read it again....Awesome writ my friend

[SingPoetically]

This is absolutely beautiful in so many ways oooooo my my myyyyyyy......Awesome write

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much for the kind words :)

[willweb]

Dancing alone, looking back on yesterdays like the are long lost friends and dreading that first step off of the porch. I know this feeling Kublakhan27. the easy chair a friend, the sunlight an enemy. It changes, each day offers new possibilities. The next knock on that door may be just the thing. I really enjoyed this today.

[kublakhan27]

Not much I can add to that my friend, that pretty much sums its up...so glad that this one spoke to you.

[Rita L. Sev]

Been on here sporadically these past few weeks, and I feel like I have been missing out when I read gems like this, Steve. I love the references you make here, and the depth of emotion that flavors every line. Alive is a very good place to be, my friend - it is where hope begins...

[kublakhan27]

True words my friend...even when you're only here sporadically, you have this ability to dial into the gist of my poems in a way that very few have...so glad you enjoyed it Rita :)

[Blake Fodor]

This is a very well constructed and cleverly written piece.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Blake, glad you enjoyed it.

[Shirlena]

What happens when you write a love poem is so much depth and nothing is sissy about it but it's brave boldly worded and romantic and any women in her right mind would be flattered. I wish I liked the Everly brothers lol (sorry) but I do love the way you write :)

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much my friend, your support means the world as you know...I guess it just felt self-indulgent at the time but you know how much I value your poetic assessments so my mind is eased knowing that you enjoyed it...no worries on the music, that's just me being melancholy me ;)

[DIVYA]

I really appreciate the result Steve! Reading this poem, I was drawn to think how a poet creates his unique world, in his mind...

"Another day of self-fulfilling fiction
siphoned through decisive shutters
swallowing deflated social bait
with arid straws of filtered daylight"

The destitute daydreams, the isolation and revelations, the anointing and the decapitation...all a part of the multi-hued , magical world.

"On my shoulders I collect
the clammy pools of blood culled
from a reality's severing duet"

Though you picture the severance and the suffering brilliantly here, I loved the conclusion the best!

"You saved me from a death
by disregarded hours
and released me to another day
alone but alive"

Yes, it's good to be alive. To feel alive. I am very inspired reading you, as always!

[kublakhan27]

It doesn't always 'feel' good to be alive on the surface, especially when loneliness is involved, but it's always a blessing nonetheless, and one we must never take for granted...sometimes I wonder if I'm 'too' conscious of my writer's mentality, and worry that I exploit it too much...as mentioned in the comments, I merely wanted to write a simple love poem, but simplicity does not come naturally to me, nor to love poems for that matter...but as always, you have brought perspectives to my writing that are fresh and unique...you have a knack for pointing out things that may have been lurking in my subconscious at the time of writing, but I needed someone to point them out to me, and you do that often ;) I'm always happy when my words resonate with you my friend...it's like an affirmation, which we all need as writers from time to time...thank you Divya :)

[DIVYA]

You are most welcome Steve. As a friend, I will always hope that your loneliness is filled by the person best equipped to fill it. That is you. The sunshine and spring are within me and in enough measure to light up my dim dark corners. I am my most beloved companion. Content in my company alone :)

Reading you always is a pleasure as it brings the fore front issues that I have subconsciously faced with myself. Keep smiling :)

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Divya...your words are always so inspiring my dear friend...I will do my best to keep smiling, and you help me more than you know in that regard :)

[DIVYA]

And I am happy and grateful for that!
Happy weekend Steve :)

[Mark]

KK… I've missed reading you… you voice is so unique here in WC, I doubt I would feel as I do about this site without having read you. You make me feel, I thank you.

[kublakhan27]

You have no idea how good that makes me feel my friend...truth be told, it's a miracle that I'm still here...every time I think I'm fed up and tired of feeling neglected, I'll get one review that changes everything, and your review has done that for me today...thanks so much :)

[Mark]

yea... there are only a few here that keep me tethered... you are one of those, so don't ever leave, WC will crumble in a butterfly effect ending up empty and starved.

[kublakhan27]

You've made my day my friend...to simply say thank you doesn't seem adequate, but you know how much it means to me :)