The Pirate's Woe

Misadventuring the eyes of a hurricane,

excitement soared through every vein,

as we trekked through and through

the whirlpools of disdain;

odysseys quested through memory,

forging the ghosts of wandering pirates,

brushing granite eyelashes as

you shook in paranoia.

`` 'Twas not the drowning sailor,

but the salty air `` you whispered,

from the crotchety wooden rowboat

you searched the oceans with.

Woe, Charybdis spared you not,

nor did she mercy me,

as we raved at Atlantis

for one another;

avoiding the scavengers,

robbing the thieves,

fleeing the mercenaries.

Not by scimitar or revolver

did I meet death; for I was

looted by rodents scouring

the ruins of my vessel,

feeding on my fleshy bones;

but still that did not wound

worse than when I discovered,

you ventured the Atlantic,

and I the vast Pacific.

Author's Note

Photo courtesy of Poerti of Deviant Art.

Reviews

[Bluefire]

To me, it speaks of two who love and risk everything for each other only to end up strangers in strange places far away.
I love the word choice and how you chose to portray the tale at sea.
Well done!

[Tai Ryens]

Spot on, Blue. Thank you, I appreciate your thoughts.

[Bluefire]

Yay! I was spot on for once! XD No problem, Taite!

[Writer #00]

Can't resist allusions to Homer. I'm still trying to find the core meaning of this poem, to be honest, but the imagery was great and the language very much like an eloquent sailor. Just one thing... isn't Charybdis a female?

Nice poem overall...like something a bard would tell. : )

[Tai Ryens]

Hm, didn't quite spot that.
Thank you.

[Writer #00]

No problem : )

[Rhea752]

... there are no words to praise your words. :P

[Baby Ricochet]

Crotchety wooden rowboat. Good line. I like the Pirate theme. Good Job Tai

[Tai Ryens]

Thank you!

[Ohhhwillow]

Every piece of yours is lavished in rich, dark, striking language, even your title, obscure and abstract is an attraction! Honestly I am in awe of you. "I the pacific", what a beautiful image to leave us with. Your talent is just haunting Tai, I admit I envy your gift!

[Tai Ryens]

I truly am flattered, aha.~

[Lina Grey]

i love your poems. just like, all of them. i never know what to say when i finish them. all the metaphors and imagery and this one i love the ending. looking for each other, not finding one another because you were in different bodies of water. lol. great job Tai

[Tai Ryens]

I absolutely hate the thought. Thanks for the review, I am flattered.

[Lina Grey]

you're welcome...hate which thought?

[Tai Ryens]

Distance.

[Lina Grey]

ahh

[SyberRose]

Enjoyed your tale of the hurricane...well done indeed and very creative.

[Tai Ryens]

Thanks.

[Frieda P]

Reads like a holy reign of terror, the mania of these words are like the hurricane of your eyelids...I read this twice and it's bouncing around in my head like a ricochet bullet. Fascinating read that rages frenzied in my head.

[Tai Ryens]

Ah, thank you.