Short-Hand Nonsense

I don't even know.

It's your shadows that cling and caress as they stretch
Broken whispers of breezes clutch the defects
All of these seasons we breathe end in sunsets
But this moment in time that we waste is our best
No cold that has grasped has shivered our skin
Yet no heat that we need burns from within
We are vessels afloat with no knowledge to swim
So we frequent our souls and delve deep in our sin

Author's Note

I don't know why I wrote this but i did

Reviews

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A very deep write.

Despite all that we are capable of as human beings, we do at times find ourselves as just an empty vessel looking for anything to sustain us and add vitality and meaning to our lives.

A very short poem, but one that has a very ponderous quality and is written from a deep well of internal musing. Nicely done.

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you very much, I appreciate that. I was doing a lot of self-reflection and soul searching when I wrote this

[Tamika]

Very well written, I especially like the lines
"We are vessels afloat with no knowledge to swim so we frequent our souls and delve deep in our sin

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you, I appreciate it! I'm glad you enjoyed it

[Lost, n'MT]

"But this moment in time that we waste is our best " might be one of the most profound things I've read yet...

"We are vessels afloat with no knowledge to swim
So we frequent our souls and delve deep in our sin "

Hauntingly accurately and wonderfully depicted. Those three lines speak out to me the most more so than the piece as a whole. Your description gave me the impression going in that you weren't very high on this piece and/or disappointed in some way. While I feel like it didn't finish to your complete liking, I still feel like there's more meaning to the lines I highlighted than the entire piece itself. Don't get me wrong, I think this is well written with a very good technique, I feel there's a poem within this poem that hasn't come out yet if that makes any sense. I like it, but I feel it's only scraping the tip of the iceberg to what is frozen within in. Those three lines really speak the most volumes in my opinion and were excellently constructed and very profound and thought provoking. Another enjoyable read.

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you very much. I appreciate how much thought went into your review. I was in a bad state of mind when I wrote this piece and my time was limited so I let out my emotion and then posted what I had. I regret not having more time to write this one at a slower, more thought out pace. Thank you again.

[Coyote Poetry]

You said a lot and left the reader with questions and the need to know more. Life is finding shadows and escaping them. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you very much, I really appreciate it!

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.

[Soulcatchers]

Awesome job! Loved this poem

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you! I appreciate it!

[zaisham9393]

I loved it!! I am so glad you wrote this.

Very well written dear friend :).

[LapseOfMind]

Wow, thank you! I'm glad that you enjoyed it!

[Voidwvlf]

Good rhyming scheme here. I especially enjoyed the last line, which evokes hedonism in pursuit of ignoring ourselves. Good job!

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you very much, I appreciate it!