THE WAY BACK

I am  watching the sun go down

and soon the sky will turn into gray

until then I will hide my tears no more

and let each star turns them into mists

 

with each echo of the ocean's roar

I beg the moon to serenade my lonely heart

and bribe the sun to lead my way

back to the path when I was with You.

 

Reviews

[Andrea]

the sorrow you express is gorgeous. I love how soothing it sounds (if that sounds weird) its very strong but doesnt scream emotion, it delivers it the way it should be, because sorrow is very soft and passionate. sorry if that doesnt make sense. this is a really great poem.

[Hiddenfire]

Really liked this one! The lines:
"until then I will hide my tears no more
and let each star turns them into mists"
described the scene so simply and nicely. thanks for the read.

[Donald Cole]

hmmm. simple and eloquent. too short for me but I think I tend to complicate things. I think a lot, I feel a lot. But what happens in between? This poem does a good job of keeping it simple, something I was never good at. nice write.
Don

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Loneliness we all feel, creating this thought of emptiness already full of love, but turned away from wanting acceptance of others. Thank you for sharing. Beautifully connected to the soul embracing the universe within us.

[Chris]

A lot of emotion within this one... it speaks well.

[AmandaN]

Liked the 2 nd verse particularly .thanks

[Coyote Poetry]

"I beg the moon to serenade my lonely heart
and bribe the sun to lead my way"
I like the poem. Using nature to express your desire and view. A strong ending to the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[jennifer little]

great poem