Ever After

Ever After

A Story by Lilmissfit

                    As I lay in the warm, sticky, crimson pool that swam around me. I memorized every detail of your face. All of the memories I had of you, every laugh we shared, every smile you gave me, every kind word you had ever said, flooded all my senses untill there was only you. I wish with everything I had inside of me that things hadnt ended up this way. Your shouts grew dimmer with each passing moment, as I struggled to stay concious. Only vagualy aware of the faces of the strangers all around us. If I could do it all over again and chose to die a different death I wouldnt change a thing. To die in your arms was a far greater gift than I deserved. The only thing I regret is the anguish and grief written across every deatil of your soul. As I looked up into those beautiful aqua eyes that reminded me of the ocean, I whispered softly

                     " You gave me life, love, happyness, and everything I could have ever asked for... Every memory we have ever had, every smile you gave me, every laugh we shared, every tear we have shed, means more to me than my life ever will.... Without you my life would have meant nothing. Live for me, love for me and above all be happy for us..... I give you my life, though I know it will never be enough to repay you for all you have given me..... I will never be far away and I want you to know that ...I will.. always... love you...."

                       I raised my trembling, blood stained hand with all of the strength I had left to give, I caressed your beautiful heart shaped face. With tears of grief streaming down your face, you placed your hand gently over my own, as the flame of life inside of my heart slowly died away, my hand slipped from your loveing grasp...your hearbreaking cry was the last thing i heard...

 

to be continued..

© 2012 Lilmissfit


Author's Note

Lilmissfit
Im thinking about making this the epilogue of a book im thinking about writing so please tell me your honest opnions. This is the first story I've ever written

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the narrator in this piece is an angel, sent by god to embrace mortal love; under the sun, she is the one to show men they are blinded. she feels the chains of love ripped from her heart and tastes a freedom she did not ask for.

the angel is you :)

Posted 12 Years Ago



Pretty epic, the guy in the story had a good woman.

Posted 12 Years Ago


I think you have just killed off your
hero. Epilogue is not required.
Suggest writing more about life.
I don`t think letting the most important
character die will work.
You are an exceptionally brilliant writer, but
death of the most beloved character , NO.
'Write about what you are well versed in----LIFE.

------ John

Posted 12 Years Ago


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it's a great start!! now on to your novel!! look up "how to write a novel in 100 days" in your browser. it is a good and thorough plan to accomplishing a sellable novel quickly. can't wait to read more.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It seems ideal for an epilogue, it gives me the sense of "I want to read more....but there isn't anything.. T_T"

Regardless nice write, I'd be interested to read more, however for the time being there shall be ambiguity!

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Im me. Im the kinda person that wont pretend to be somethin im not. I like to have fun, laugh, be happy, make my friends and family happy, I make misstakes I wish I could take back. I stand up for wha.. more..

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