Whispers

My heart whispers it's loneliness...

Some days I stop and listen to the beat of my heart

but it whispers it's loneliness to me. Then, I wish I hadn't listened.

Most of the time the whispers can be ignored, but not all days;

I am not strong enough this day.

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[Glen Yumang Manese]

Some days I stop and listen
to the beats of my heart
but it whispers it's loneliness to me.

Then, I wish I hadn't listened.

Most of the time
the whispers can be ignored,
but not all days;

I am not strong enough this day.
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you used the theme with the (s) --- in your words:

whispers --- days...and believe adding the (s) in beats...
would deem this write --- the tone of this is felt...
the way you want us as the reader to be the person...
and acknowledge the experience for which you put to words...
I would break this down a bit --- give the verse more depth...
the way it is --- I do not pause to reflect the intent...
in one collective group...but if you feel that's how it should be...
then so be...

[lindalou]

Thank you for taking the time to read this and your helpful suggestions. It helps to look at my work from another's perspective.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

you're welcome...