Worlds

a million stars away, somewhere
a boy lies on his bed
conjuring up worlds and worlds of
perfection; the kind that
we cannot even begin to imagine.
he laughs and runs his hands
through his auburn hair
as he muses to himself about
death and desire
and how maybe destiny
is just one big tapestry
constantly unraveling itself

a million stars away, somewhere
a boy lies on his bed
and I lie here, conjuring up the worlds;
the universes of perfection
that he left with me
to remember him by

Author's Note

I'm sorry, it's not very good. I ran out of ideas. :( haha :)

Reviews

[pumpkin head]

WOW a wonderful sensual read. Enjoyed

[Kate]

thanks! :D

[Distant horizons]

Very nicely done. i like the idea of connections unseen that you make here.

[Kate]

thank you. :)

[Autumn]

It is actually very good! I can see you have talent to project yourself in a oposite sex character. In the beginning i though you wrote from the boy's point of view writing it at the 3rd person at the same time..don't know if I make sense?

Nevertheless, very sweet and soft poem. Great repetition.

[Kate]

I appreciate that you took time to analyze my poem like this. thank you. :)

[Legolas]

This is such a great poem. Im adding it to my library as soon as I write this review. This is such a beautiful and amazing poem. Keep it up!

[Kate]

thank you so very much. :)

[Alm]

:] what are you talking about. This is beautiful and lovely and my heartstrings have been pulled. Write moar >:D ily, Kate. Hahaha.

-Alyssa

[Kate]

thank you, Alyssa!! :) heeheehee

[Alm]

:)

[Sujash I. Purna]

this is beautiful but I think you have a long way to go.
Loved the choice of words like "one big tapestry", "auburn hair" and "conjuring up"

Keep it up!

[Kate]

thank you! I appreciate it. :)