This is Grief

Each line consists of exactly 10 syllables.

Stomach makes a pit, when asked to please sit

you cannot disguise, the dread in your eyes

to avoid a scene, you pause in between

words that now realize, their role in surprise

hand on the shoulder, never felt colder

voices now blocked out, leaving room to shout

letting go to run, to pursue the sun

only clouds are out, no space left for doubt

falling to the ground, lost and won't be found

cannot find the head, that stored what was said

how to get off feet. when feeling defeat

today grief was fed, loved one is now dead

Reviews

[Griffin Hill]

Very nice rhythm, word choice, and balance.

I particularly liked these lines:
'hand on the shoulder, never felt colder'
&
'today grief was fed, loved one is now dead'