In Brevity

Brevity is a word I have been hearing a lot in conversations. My muse took inspiration from this beautiful word creating this poem

In Brevity 

By

Carlos Lorenzo Estrada 

"Yesterday's the past, tomorrow's the future, but today is a gift. That's why it's called the present." Bill keane

I remember yesterday, as if it were today.

Seconds pass to minutes, as moments slip away

A Sea that never changes, reflects its immortality 

A heart that never loves; mirrors Incongruity 

Captured shades of amber through sunsets in repose.

Impermanence viewed in shadows; as day comes to a close.

We breathe for but an instant; as time winds its way down

How many more will we take before its final sound?

Disavow all abnegation; to live without reproach.

Seize the moments of this life, live love at ends approach.

Become the sea...

In brevity.

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading this poem feel free to leave your thoughts and comments below.

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

'we are in time a mote of dust
a pin prick in an ocean sky'

Yes, we are fleeting in the overall picture of things. Might as well, make every minute count, we are a long time dead. I wrote on this theme myself.

Really like this poem Carlos. One of your best. Love those little bits of meaningful brevity.

Chris

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Thank you so much Chris for your thoughts on this work. I really love the theme of this poem and feel such a close association in its belief. It was my hope the reader would feel how finite life is but also how infinite the possibilities are within this short existence. Thank you so much again for your thoughts I truly value them.

[Terry]

This poem is the first time I read something about the mortality of life without my thanatophobia acting up. The execution of tone is very well done!

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Thank you Terry for the kind comment I truly appreciate it. This poem is becoming one of my personal favorites to be honest because I so believe in its message. Thank you again.

[Dave]

Truly it is said that we are borne of the sea. Isn't that why we are inexorably drawn to it?

Take care - Dave

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Thank you Dave for your thoughts. Yes, we are born of nature and in time return to her. Our fascination for the sea taps into an innately ancient and perhaps primal recognition of where we were born from. I love the ocean and living 8 miles away from it on the west coast has spoiled me. But nothing brings me closer to freedom and this sense of liberation then sitting on the sand looking out to sea. I'm drawn to her infinity. It truly feels like I am home. Thank you my friend for your comment.

[Dave]

I was born and raised in Atlantic City. As children, we didn't realize that we were in our own special heaven. I left just after the casinos came in. My friends have told me that was a very smart move.
Take care my friend - Dave

[John the Baptist]

The last two lines make the poem. Each of us is a microcosm of the macrocosm.

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Thank you John I believe you're correct in your thoughts on this poem. The last two lines truly encompasses the totality of this work's theme. It leaves that perfect eternal image in the reader's mind. Thank you again for your thoughts.

[Neville]

in the most succinct of terms, this is my favourite Carlos L Estrada yet :)

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Thank you Neville this is one of my favorites because I so believe in its message. Time truly is fleeting and we must learn to live in the moment and make it last forever.

[Neville]

....................... Amen :)

[Alexcat]

Adore this piece, we really forget how short life is and it's so easy to get so caught up with yesterday's problems. An important message, makes me want to go out and live today to its fullest!
Thank you for such an inspiring piece

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Thank you, Alexcat, for the kind review. This piece is becoming one of my favorites because I so believe in the message it conveys. Time truly is fleeting and we have to learn to live in the moments and make them last forever. This reminds me to do just that. Thank you so very much I appreciate your time and the kind words.

[redzone]

we human do have a very short life span when compared to our world, our universe, and the cosmos.... and yet we have evolved consciousness and can not only contemplate our past, but can dream and make real our future.... so yes, seize the day, seize the hour, live life loudly with every breath.... be one of the waves in that ocean of time....

nicely written Carlos....

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Thank you my friend I agree with every single one of your words. When we are born we are afforded a limited amount of time on this sublime blue orb. I remember at 8 yrs old having a new friend in school named stevie. And right before summer we wished each other well and said we will see each other soon once summer vacation ended. He was struck by a car and killed a month later. Life is finite, but love and friendship is forever. I still remember my young friend and I'm in my mid 50s. Live for this day because there is no promise of tomorrow. Be the ocean, be endless, even in brevity. Because even within ephemeral moments there is infinite possibilities. Thank you so much for your kind thoughts.

[John Prophet]

Hi Carlos,

Your have a way of spinning words that’s quite hypnotic. Great write as usual.

JP

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Thank you JP you're very kind my friend. In all honesty I would attribute my style improving piece by piece due to reading the art of others here in the community. There are so many talented and unique voice, yours included, that one can easy learn from in some capacity. That's why I try to encourage people to read the work of others. And let that artist know you enjoy their work. This is a community of writers for a reason. It's an amazing tool at your fingertips which graces us the opportunity to learn from more professional artistic poets and storytellers. A person would be crazy not to take the advantages this community offers to learn from it. This is literally a school for writers and I'm talking a highly rated one. It's like the great writers of the past sitting at a dive in Paris mesmerizing one another with their art except we are a world of writers sharing our profound love of writing and weaving friendships in the process. You not only have the opportunity to read great writing but also communicate directly with the artist. That's an amazing thing to have access to. And I'm so appreciative of this fact. I literally feel I'm get better with each passing work because of everyone here. So thank you JP for the kind comments you give as well as the wonderful art you submit because it along with all the others makes me a better writer.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

what a great ending to this poem. I feel this poem....my days are numbered and the days seem to go by so quickly...reminds me of being a kid and days that seemed to last forever...

well done, Carlos.
j.

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Thank you Jacob I truly appreciate it. When reading this words back they conjured the same thoughts in me as well. The summer days swimming in a river with my friends until the sun faded to orange and running home to avoid punishment for being out late. I wish I would have held onto those moments a little longer then I did. They truly were ephemeral, as youth always is. Thank you again my friend.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Days have felt awfully short, and not only because summer is drawing to an end, everything just feels too fast, there's hardly time to relax it feels. I love the feeling and the way you captured it in this piece, and I particularly liked the sort of thing you taught with it, gotta make the most of it while we have it!

'We breathe for but an instant; as time winds its way down, how many more will we take before its final sound?' I loved this bit and the hard-hitting questions throughout it. Thank you for sharing, have a wonderful day, and stay safe!

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Thank you, Colacat, for taking the time to read this poem. It was important for me to hold true to the idea of the fleeting aspects of life and its association to brevity. How the sea represented the infinite and immortal aspects of our universe contrasted against our lives. Though a singular second can attain an eternity of love. We should aspire to live like the sea, and the boundless possibilities which define it. To make our last breath last forever in memory.