biggest mistake.

[You dont impress me

you disgust me

you used me

abused me

i know

what

you

want

from me

i know whats

on your mind all

the time and im giving

into the repulsiveness of it

but this is only because i love you.]

Reviews

[Kasey]

wow. i feel a lot of emotian in this poem. i love this. actually. its kind of ironic how i feel about it. i just. i can totally relate to the feelings expressed in this piece. i am totally adding this to my favorites.

one suggestion though. the layout could be a bit better if you get rid of the pattern of the stanzas and just put it together so the lines flow better. for example.

"i know whats
on your mind all
the time im giving
into the repulsiveness of it
but this is only because i love you"

that is an amazing line all-together but if you spread it more like this it might flow better


"I know whats
on your mind
all the time
im giving into this
repulsiveness
but its all because
i love you"

and so fourth and so on but like i said i see what you did with the whole shape of the poem and also i re-worded it so it's your work, do with it as you please. its just a suggestion. but over-all, this is a great piece.

[Kiara]

flowed effortlessly
filled with powerful emotion
in the depths of every line
you express very well
really enjoyed this:)
-arabella

[Satchmo's Gal]

I love this poem. The message your lover can hurt more than your enemy is a powerful one, and you pulled it off with such bravado. Great job.

[Egan]

This poem takes me through many emtions in such a short amount of time. Tis short but powerful. I love the ending such a twist I was expecting......an ending much more hate inspired. Great Write!

[n]

This is very good.
Really captured my attention.
Good job.