When the Rock Breaks

about a friend :) I think she'll know who she is

That moment

when the rock breaks

that moment,

when your rock skates

on the edge of the ice,

not paying attention to the heights.

When the person who is your rock

starts crying,

you don't know what to do,

normally, she seems like she's flying.

Without a care,

without any insecurities,

so when you have to be strong,

which, apparently you have been all along,

you crash and burn

and both get hurt.

When the strong one breaks

it's like seeing your fate,

because if she's gone,

you're not far beyond.

Author's Note

reviews please!

Reviews

[Odayin]

I read it 3 times, and you know what that means Sophie!! Novel Time!!:)
Okay so first things first, I really like this poem as it was unique, and I enjoy unique writing because it usually has a deeper meaning, as this one does. So starting off: nicely done:)

This is the way I perceived it:

Okay, now with the first stanza: the rock is excellent symbolism of something we love.
"when your rock skates
on the edge of the ice,"
I would have strong belief that you're referring to the reaction we would make our love just skated so mindlessly so close to death. Almost carelessly...how would we feel?

The second stanza relates to that moment when our loved one is crying and we don't really know what to do because we are so shocked. Usually she's so happy, so powerful, so invincible.

So now the 3rd stanza would describe that moment where we all try to be strong, try to have her back, try to fix everything, but we just fall short. As a result, all that hard work, all those wants and cares, all gone...crashed...burned...and sadly, destroyed.

The last stanza, which is my favorite, states that once the strong one breaks, once that first mistake, that first slip up and falling short, you can pretty much see what's going to happen next: you following in her footsteps. And those footsteps don't lead to a happy place...

But all in all I thought it was a really amazing poem and you should, once again, keep it up because we all enjoy reading them:)

[Abbie]

hmmm, interesting poem. don't really know what else to say, but it was pretty good overall. :)