Thoughts

Thoughts

 

My thoughts float in the air

They slid right over your head

You are oblivious

 

They make a murky pool

And I watch as they mix with others

Oh how I wish your thoughts were mine

 

If they were could I know you?

Would we share more than just time,

Never talking

 

Oh how I wish you were mine

Much like your thoughts

You are unattainable

 

So close

But miles away

In another pond.

Author's Note

please be honest!

Reviews

Well I feel that all i can say is that to puts this in perspective if you share thoughts you would learn stuff that they didn't want you to know so I think this poem is alittle off balanced.

[Mahima]

nice ! :)

[The Water Queen]

I love how you get to the point quickly but extend it to continue through the poem. I love this stanza:

Oh how I wish you were mine
Much like your thoughts
You are unattainable

Great poem

--The Angel of the Earth--

[Tara♥Undefined&h..]

OOOOOOOOOOHH! So sweet this is sooo cute mary. I loooooooooooooved it! you should ad more tho its kinda short!