all clear

yeh this is a feeling i got when sitting behind a library window reading...

all clear,

clear as day

when viewed behind

your window!

 

without that boundary,

its all blurry...

when you walk it

it is scary!

 

its the city!

The city with no limits

when viewed behind your

window!

with the golden sunset

waving goodbye for the day

 

when the golden light

washes over it again at dawn

you feel the urge to walk it

with the arms swinging freely in the air

with your hair falling victim to the air

 

exploration being your only intention

early in the morning

round the corner,

there lies the

scariest scret of the city

 

all clear??

its never clear at the back streets

with all the bodies lying on the streets!

 

Author's Note

ok.. i dont know what you are gonna make of this but what i know is i wanna hear it!!

Reviews

[khalid]

i think it expresses how much nothing is ever clear in our recent life due to pollution in all fields. pollution of the air that makes the sky grey and stars are not clear, pollution of land that makes our food poisinous, pollution of water that is killing the marine life, and what is worse is pollution in thoughts and facts. there is no longer what is called clear fact these days. i started to doubt that the sun rises from the east..is it a fact that the place the sun rises from is the east? even does the sun really rise to us or its we who go twards it? anyway, nothing is clear these days although leaders try to tell us the fake truth..

[luviva]

lobe the pollution in facts and thoughts..
real great and thanxx for the review, as always i appreciate your visit!!

[khalid]

thank you, i enjoy my visit or i wouldnt..

[Paul Seaman]

there is a dark side to every light, on this planet of light & dark.

[luviva]

agree with you all the way!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

hi there, initially i thought that you were forming the shape of a christmas treeyour choice of font indicates that you are making a huge declaration which you want a crowd of people to hear and you have clearly established your own pace, tone a rythem.
I do admire your confidence and motivation to share your observations so loudly!

[luviva]

thank you so much S... thats really encouraging and yeh,
am one person who does not fear for my voice to be hard.. am straightforward person en always think out loud.
thanx again my friend!

[Onyia-Ali, Kingsley Chu..]

The form and structure struck my eyes immediately I observed it. I think that the shape can be better analyzed. For your poetic intention, it captures a favorable atmospheric condition with the rays of the sun; this makes "us feel the urge to walk it." well done.

[luviva]

thanxx for your kind words..
always appreciate the visits

[Tarry Franck]

You brought together the Beauty and the Beast! Nicely done!!!

[luviva]

wow,
thanxx

[Tarry Franck]

You're quite welcomed :)

[Danielle]

Interesting....nice work!

[luviva]

thanxx s :D

[scripted]

i get everyone taking the city as being the place to be... there's lights, big cars, lots of people i mean it sounds ideal, but in reality the big city holds much crime, hate and a lot of murder... i love the poem:) thank you for sharing yours truely

[luviva]

thanx for the review and your words my friend... tht what make us better writers here!

[DIVYA]

Luviva...you write such soul-searching and touching poems. Proud to be friends with a thinking writer like you.

[luviva]

ohh tht is sooo swt!!
thanxxx

[DIVYA]

you are welcome! Looking forward to more writing from you soon.

[luviva]

may be... yeh thanxx for the motivation u know..

[Kyle Sky]

Great. I love the imagery and theme. Truly, most things is not what it seems, for every glowing street, there will always be a darkness in it. I love how the imagery added peace at the beginning and ended it with a statement of disaster
"with all the bodies lying on the streets!"
also its nice how you placed the dark surprise on "the corner of street". it truly is the part of the street where a surprise usually waits. Great piece of work

[luviva]

thanxx sky..
real constructivee

[David Scott]

Yes luviva, reality is never "all clear". You called it. Seems like this is one you have had here before...? Reads as familiar to me.
Gramar could be a bit better, but I got what you were going for.

[luviva]

well thats great and you are right my friend reality aint clear at all!!
thanxx for the review...