The Visit

The Visit

A Poem by marcie

The Angels held a meeting

Beyond the clouds above.

One said " We must take this poor soul back"

"They have suffered long enough"

 

"But who will go to fetch them?" one asked,

"i fear its nearly time"

The smallest angel of the group stood up and said

"I think this task is mine "

 

Descending  on soft downy wings,

To where the chosen lay .

With movements soft as a babys breath,

Draws close and begins to say .

 

"Please dont be scared for i have come"

"To offer you re-birth"

"An end to all this suffering "

"You just cant find on Earth"

 

" Our journey is going to take us "

" To a place thats vast and grand "

" Dont worry about your loved ones "

" In time they will come to understand"

 

" So take my hand and one last breath"

" Your time on earth is done "

" You have fought so bravely through it all "

" But now this battle cant be won "

 

Asscending ever skywards

The poor soul being gently led

The only proof an angel came to earth

A soft white feather  on the bed.

© 2010 marcie


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The flow and form are so wonderfully delicate, giving us the most tender glimpse of life and that which awaits us... the beauty of the angels. So vivid and drifting like a lullaby...

Posted 14 Years Ago


So beautiful and kind. I like the story in your words. Description and story was amazing. Thank you for the positive poem. I like the ending.
Coyote

Posted 14 Years Ago


Every tiny white feather I find on my journey I pick up, say a prayer and set free
back into the wind. Though a few I have kept ...

Lovely, uplifting poem of faith.
A special thanks to Emma for sending me here! lol

Peace n Light

Posted 14 Years Ago


There's so much emotion in this poem .. and it's beautifully put together. It's rather like a parable, a tribute towards hope and faith.

'Descending on soft downy wings,
To where the chosen lay .
With movements soft as a babys breath,
Draws close and begins to say . '

That stanza has such fine meter and is a gentle introduction to the dialogue ..

" So take my hand and one last breath"
" Your time on earth is done "
" You have fought so bravely through it all "
" But now this battle cant be won "


And the verse above is so touchingly put, it near brought tears to my eyes.

I'm truly impressed with your writing and will refer your work to some of my friends who, I'm sure, will find it marvellous. New writer/poet you might be but you show amazing skill.



Posted 14 Years Ago



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Derbyshire, United Kingdom



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