Geisha Soup

Noodles sip

In winter’s nip

Asakusa strength

Saves the Tokyo soul

 

 

Reviews

[Rita L. Sev]

Technically, a Haiku can be a non-rhyming poem consisting of 17 syllables or fewer. The 5-7-5 rule is a formula used in American schools, to simplify the form. So yes, Marc - your poem in 17 syllables (I counted) and a Haiku - and a lovely one at that!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Rita :) I just give it a try, thanks for the info.

[dave]

Good job! Maybe it's because i've been conditioned by your writing, but whatever you write (even a haiku) I feel very attached to the imagery. I love hot ramen on a cold day, and somehow felt the same feeling from your first two lines. I'm not particularly good at writing haikus, so I can't really critique it because I don't know what to base my comments on- but from my point of view, this is fantastic.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks again Brother :) I am glad you like this piece.

[InsanityWriter]

Nice. (: I really like the imagery! ^_^

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks, I am glad :) you like it.

[Eddie Phillips]

When I as younger I would write haikus as I sat in class. I like this because it has a traditional haiku feel. Keep writing Marc. I love the honesty in you writing and the purpose you put in doing something you love. I read the argument you guys were having today. Do not let naysayers stop you from expressing yourself. Good luck brother

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Brother, :) I am very thankful to have you here, thanks for believing in my work. Yeah I just can't let them trash some friends here, that is why I defended our friends.

[A. H. Pinley]

Nice piece!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks A.H still the orio stuck in your throut? lol Thanks a lot, cute picture love it!

[A. H. Pinley]

The kid needs water.....

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

lol

[Dakshta]

Nice write! :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Dakshta, appreciate your time :) I will visit your work soon. Thanks!

[Dakshta]

Welcome :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I am just writing for a month and no background in the world of poetry. Hope you will always share your wisdom and correct my mistakes as I need it to solidify my dreams to write. Thank you, I love you all.

[DIVYA]

A great work...
Gives the reader nice flavor of a culture!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Div, I always fascinated by Japanese culture. Thanks for the reads.

[realmwriter]

Never been very good at writing a Haiku. But you have done a fine job here...!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Brother :) glad you like it. I am also hesitant to write Haiku because I am not expert in this type of poem.

[realmwriter]

I'm going to have to try my hand at it again as it can be a fun and challenging piece to write.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Yeh try it Bro. :) you can do it :)

[realmwriter]

I'm sure I can but Haiku is certainly not something I can just free write. But I will try it none the less...!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Nothing impossible before I am thinking the same way you think :) just trust what you feel and write :)

[realmwriter]

Good advice, thank you...!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Welcome always Brother.