4/18 NEW WORDS - Poseidon Ave.

I was comfortable with being alone.

The words “I Love You” began to sound like French to me.

I studied Japanese in college.

Until you came strolling along of course.

Our encounter seemed innocent.

Crossing paths on a suggestive street corner

where hookers play hop scotch

on the chalk outlines left from homicide scenes.

I wondered if you were lost at first.

Wondering how you permeate my subconscious mind

where my better half resides with one glance of your beauty.

Stupefying my soul at a velocity unknown to my once broken heart.

Not that it’s fixed, but it’s ready to be healed now.

I shouted to the Goddess in you and insecurity turned its ear.

So I assumed.

Still I came after you and locked eyes with yours,

begging for existence outside of this physical world.

An influx of kisses proceeded.

Your rogue hands caressing away apart of my soul.

My eyes open after our embrace staring at a chalk outline

of myself as you played hopscotch with wolves.

“That will be 5 dollars” you said.

Deplore resonates from my breath as I pay her.

Marking my name in history as her 100^th customer.

How proud our mothers would be.

I remind myself that love will never meet you on a street corner

around midnight because even love needs beauty sleep.

I was comfortable being alone.

Now I must become comfortable with

never crossing Poseidon Avenue again.

Where beautiful vampires go Antoine fishing in a sea of

egos and blindfolds.

Enter at your own risk.

Exit when they tell you to…

Reviews

[Clarisse Nanoit]

OMG. Perfect. Your imagery was absolutely perfect. I am favoriting this piece! This is very Travis McCoy-esque, only his pieces generally have a lighter feel than this one. Still... Idk how familiar you are with his lyrics, but "Sloppy Love Jingle" pts 1,2,and3 are very good and you should look up, "Everyday's Forecast" and/or "Papercut Chronicles". Too good, just like this. I love every piece of yours I've ever read. lol. I would love to have a compilation of your pieces. You have a natural knack for writing. Great piece. Loved it.
KH

[Adam Greenfield]

Fantastic write, and just as enjoyable to read. With ease you placed the reader on Poseidon Street and put everything in motion. The one line I kept coming back to:

"Not that it's fixed, but it's ready to be healed now."

Part of that healing process is this realization. I think this line is a perfect fit for the events that unfold in this piece.

Great write.

[Clarisse Nanoit]

oh, and those songs I mentioned are by Gym Clas Heroes. lol. Travie is their lyricist. =P

[Poetic Beauty]

this poem had a surprise ending. This is greatly detailed and you did a wonderful job using the words for this week.

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

i really like this poem . the last two lines fit in perfectly. the whole read was very good but my favorite stanza is "Deplore resonates from my breath as I pay her. Marking my name in history as her 100th customer. How proud our mothers would be. I remind myself that love will never meet you on a street corner around midnight because even love needs beauty sleep"