Love poam

The highest art is the axpression of love

Beautiful girl, I loev your face
I really like that thing your nose hangs off of
I wish I had a chance to change
If I could be or not to be
I'd choose the light through the broken window
And blame the rain for fogging up your soul
but time is like a thief in the evening
It won't wait for me
Even though I have a ticket
and the train is full
So smile with your teeth out
as butterflies exploed around you
pop pop 

Author's Note

Please ignore gramer mistakes

Reviews

[D Connolly]

Matt, I'm laughing so hard; I think it's a combination of the spelling mistakes (the Axpression of love) and the way your worded this. "I really like that thing your nose hangs off of" sounds like something Thor would say LOL. If there ever was a pick up line that would work on me, I think that would be it.

[mattavelli]

Thanks, Dani! :)
My line was, "do you want to be my girlfriend?" any response but a "no" is pretty much a "why not". Haha
I wrote this after reading something Barleygirl wrote, stuck in my craw, I think was the title. Its pretty much lines of overthetop nonsense except for line three, which I added later to meet the requirement for a wc contest.

[Roland Petrov]

I tried to ignore the mistakes, but when you misspell love and poem in a love poem, that's serious! You do have an interesting description of a face, though: "that thing your nose hangs off of". That's an axpression of love, all right!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

"I wish I had a chance to change
If I could be or not to be
I'd choose the light through the broken window
And blame the rain for fogging up your soul"
Interesting lines here.. I enjoyed reading this.. Good work!

[mattavelli]

Thanks, Yumma! :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You are welcome, Matt! Btw it's Yumna 😂

[mattavelli]

Sorry, Yumna!
It's my iPad... Text is too small. I'll do better next time. :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Haha its okay☺

[Einstein Noodle]

ahaha i'm glad i read your note before leaving my review .. ;)
Papaya told me to check this out .. not the run of the mill love expression ..i can't imagine what would be the reaction to an opening line of "I really like that thing your nose hangs off of " ...i love it! might have been just the trick when i was younger and tried so hard to be debonair and in control of my tongue .. which of course ended most always in disaster ;{
E.

[mattavelli]

Thanks, Einstein! :)

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Lol...cute much!
'I really like the thing your nose hangs of' lol that's a keeper it's so cute how could you lose! Too clever! Starz x

[mattavelli]

Thanks, Starzy! :)

[Hebe]

I like it because it reminds me of those abstract face paintings in an art gallery .... It makes sense in a weird way .....

[mattavelli]

Thanks, Hebe! :)
Must have been my subconscious.

[Ana Papaya]

Lol. This adorable. Really like.

[mattavelli]

Thank you, Ana! :)

[barleygirl]

Very interesting & somewhat playful (I think) word-crafting . . . it seems like your spag (spelling/grammar) is intentionally messy, similar to the way you describe things, not in the typical suave ways . . . ex: nose hanging off the face (unusual & a leap from the typical ways of describing a beautiful girl). It's always refreshing to read a tribute to love that's totally off-the-wall instead of dripping with earnestness.

[mattavelli]

Thanks, Barleygirl! :)

[Michael X]

interesting, romantic, a bit theatrical. Reminds of a romantic comedy!

[mattavelli]

Thank you, Michael! :)

[Lorry]

Brilliant. The child like mistakes only enhance the sentiment and the thing your nose hangs off line is superb. Even Shakespeare would smile at this.

[mattavelli]

Thank you, Nemo! :)

[Lorry]

You're very welcome.