Please help me choose a title

Please help me choose a title

A Poem by mattavelli
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I plan to submit this poem for Publication. I'd appreciate any advice or suggestions you may have.

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it's hard to state just how bizarre 
Our efforts to seem special are, 
as life's become a clearance sale 
where reason's swapped for fairy tale; 
and repetition seems our way, 
to cling to comfort, rarely stray;  
and when we do 
the thrill and dread collide. 
And when the new world rises 
It will be our ways that died. 

So let's get rid of special, 
and ignore the branders' screams 
that frenzy us with slogans 
and distract us from our dreams; 
let’s rip our minds wide open 
so our souls can touch what's real, 
and savor every heartbeat 
as we watch our culture heal. 

Let's toss away religion 
and forget to fear the dark, 
and love ourselves in everyone 
and shape a world less stark; 
and marvel at our feet, 
they've spread our species so diverse; 
and focus on the betterment 
and share to change the worse. 

Let's celebrate the value 
and the values of our kin, 
place children above trophies 
as their epic tales begin; 
and recognize that feelings 
are the seed of every act, 
that want is all we do, 
and all we know hangs from that fact. 

Let's want to make a better world 
and want to share the feast. 
Let's want our lives to matter 
more than some obnoxious beast; 
but let the need to shine be stripped 
and fed back to the stars, 
so our whole race can gleam in grace

and know the light is ours.

 

© 2019 mattavelli


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Rew
It is unfortunate that humans are human.
" special "
It is the only thing which humans can attain to be, " to have this want", among 8 billion other "special" people.

I'd like to see religion disappear but when it disappear it is usually prompted by a Mao Zedong, a Stalin, a Hitler or a Trump. And then they become the religion.

Hitler became special in a special way.

As has Trump and his adherents.
It's the only way some people can become special.

Like I said it's unfortunate that humans are human.

This is not to detract from your fine work but merely to point out that we all have this desire to be special.
This is why we write.
It is our only way, to attempt, to be special.

That's what I think.
Rew.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

8 Months Ago

Thanks for reading, Rew, and for your thoughtful comments on humanity! :)
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Love oneself indeed. I enjoyed this and hopefully
I wont be afraid of the dark

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

3 Months Ago

Thanks for reading, Ranger! :)
Let's toss away religion
and forget to fear the dark,
and love ourselves in everyone
and shape a world less stark;

Such a wonderful stanza here, i really like your writing,
you have talent. So nicely formatted as well.
Nicely penned

Posted 8 Months Ago


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Rew
It is unfortunate that humans are human.
" special "
It is the only thing which humans can attain to be, " to have this want", among 8 billion other "special" people.

I'd like to see religion disappear but when it disappear it is usually prompted by a Mao Zedong, a Stalin, a Hitler or a Trump. And then they become the religion.

Hitler became special in a special way.

As has Trump and his adherents.
It's the only way some people can become special.

Like I said it's unfortunate that humans are human.

This is not to detract from your fine work but merely to point out that we all have this desire to be special.
This is why we write.
It is our only way, to attempt, to be special.

That's what I think.
Rew.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

8 Months Ago

Thanks for reading, Rew, and for your thoughtful comments on humanity! :)
Worship is a digest.. read more
The Death of Culture.
Our Culture FOR SALE
The Light of Our Race
The Grace of Race

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

10 Months Ago

Thanks for reading, William! :)
Those are great title ideas.
That was great! I read it back through a few times then actually rapped it out loud with a beat. The only spot I got hung up on was the second to last line. So our whole race can gleam in grace. I wanted to drop whole. So our race can gleam in grace. I like commercials, but you're right. Media and cancel culture have led us to need a lot of healing! Excellent poem, man!

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"Searching, finding and learning." The poem is amazing my friend. I like the search, the finding and the understanding taught in the words. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

1 Year Ago

Thanks for reading, Coyote! :)
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

You are welcome my friend.
Hello Matt! Pleasure to make your acquaintance.

I would name it " Lets"

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

1 Year Ago

Thanks for reading, Silvanus! :)
Let's celebrate the value
and the values of our kin,
place children above trophies
as their epic tales begin;

This is such a lovely poem
so beautifully expressed
loving ourselves in others
and teaching our children
values to share and love
one another..nice work here Matt
"A Balanced Act"

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

If we would learn to love ourselves and others more this world would be a better place.

We need to learn to live a little more and embrace experiences that will make us love the adventure of life more.

Great thought provoking poem.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A fantastic write, words and sentiments more of us need to hear!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

mattavelli

1 Year Ago

Thanks for reading, Travis! :)

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