I plan to submit this poem for Publication. I'd appreciate any advice or suggestions you may have.
it's hard to state just how bizarre Our efforts to seem special are, as life's become a clearance sale where reason's swapped for fairy tale; and repetition seems our way, to cling to comfort, rarely stray; and when we do the thrill and dread collide. And when the new world rises It will be our ways that died.
So let's get rid of special, and ignore the branders' screams that frenzy us with slogans and distract us from our dreams; let’s rip our minds wide open so our souls can touch what's real, and savor every heartbeat as we watch our culture heal.
Let's toss away religion and forget to fear the dark, and love ourselves in everyone and shape a world less stark; and marvel at our feet, they've spread our species so diverse; and focus on the betterment and share to change the worse.
Let's celebrate the value and the values of our kin, place children above trophies as their epic tales begin; and recognize that feelings are the seed of every act, that want is all we do, and all we know hangs from that fact.
Let's want to make a better world and want to share the feast. Let's want our lives to matter more than some obnoxious beast; but let the need to shine be stripped and fed back to the stars, so our whole race can gleam in grace
It is unfortunate that humans are human.
" special "
It is the only thing which humans can attain to be, " to have this want", among 8 billion other "special" people.
I'd like to see religion disappear but when it disappear it is usually prompted by a Mao Zedong, a Stalin, a Hitler or a Trump. And then they become the religion.
Hitler became special in a special way.
As has Trump and his adherents.
It's the only way some people can become special.
Like I said it's unfortunate that humans are human.
This is not to detract from your fine work but merely to point out that we all have this desire to be special.
This is why we write.
It is our only way, to attempt, to be special.
That's what I think.
Rew.
Posted 3 Years Ago
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3 Years Ago
Thanks for reading, Rew, and for your thoughtful comments on humanity! :)
Worship is a digest.. read moreThanks for reading, Rew, and for your thoughtful comments on humanity! :)
Worship is a digesting behavior. I think the desire to be worshipped tops it though. Do you write for yourself, to feel special; or do you write for the reader, to share?
great message, wonderful metaphor used...my suggestion is this for title...
"Stocking our Wants on the Proper Shelf"
if people stopped getting everything they wanted...and thought about those in need...we might be more satisfied with what we've got...and give a bit more.
j.
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
Hey, Jacob! :)
Thanks for reading and the suggestion.
LIFE IS A PARTY. DON'T BE A PINATA.
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