Never trust a poet

Never trust a poet

A Poem by MBUYISA
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i'm not this kind of a poet but this poem is about how poets can constract verses and with them....hypnotize people.

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Never trust a poet

 

I read between the lines

I am articulate and i hypnotize minds

My words can fool you

And seduce you to surrender

I paralyze souls; I'm a big time offender

 

Words, is all I have

Pretentious poet that I am

I wrote a poem once, and said its hers

She fell for it and said I’m hers

I flirt with words, not emotions

Love her not with affection

My love is but, a description

 

In writing; I sweep her off her feet

In words; I'm a man of her dreams

In deeds; I take her to my sheets

However fall in love with a poet, not.

 

© 2015 MBUYISA


Author's Note

MBUYISA
I am not that kind of a poet. This poem is about how poets can constract words and with them hypnotize people. Thank you for reading. uThokozani uyazibongela

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I like the poem especially the lines "I flirt with words, not emotions" and "In writing; I sweep her off her feet/In words; I'm a man of her dreams/In deeds; I take her to my sheets". But here are some of my corrections:

*I am articulate and hypnotize minds -> I am articulate and I hypnotize minds (parallelism)
*paralyse -> paralyze

And I see that you are fond of using commas to indicate a pause in thought or to introduce a dramatic idea. I suggest ellipsis or a double dash instead. I often find them better and more appropriate.

This reminds me of the poem I wrote a long time ago. It's entitled "Beware of the Writer".
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/SennahBorms/1303134/

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MBUYISA

10 Years Ago

Thank you Arzel.....your reviews are appreciated. Can't wait to read "beware of the writer"



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Ah the power of a poet with a pen is awesome.We can twist reality to fit our images in our minds. Great poem :)

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MBUYISA

10 Years Ago

Thank you very much...your reviews are always appreciated.
Vidya Bacchus

10 Years Ago

You are welcome :)
Awesome poem keep up the great work

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MBUYISA

10 Years Ago

Thank you ....i'm glad you enjoyed it
melissa

10 Years Ago

Your welcome
Like looks, words can be deceiving too! Enjoyed it. Great work!

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MBUYISA

10 Years Ago

Thank you ....i'm glad you enjoyed it
I like the poem especially the lines "I flirt with words, not emotions" and "In writing; I sweep her off her feet/In words; I'm a man of her dreams/In deeds; I take her to my sheets". But here are some of my corrections:

*I am articulate and hypnotize minds -> I am articulate and I hypnotize minds (parallelism)
*paralyse -> paralyze

And I see that you are fond of using commas to indicate a pause in thought or to introduce a dramatic idea. I suggest ellipsis or a double dash instead. I often find them better and more appropriate.

This reminds me of the poem I wrote a long time ago. It's entitled "Beware of the Writer".
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/SennahBorms/1303134/

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MBUYISA

10 Years Ago

Thank you Arzel.....your reviews are appreciated. Can't wait to read "beware of the writer"

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