playing for keeps

lately you've been like a disappearing Hollywood starlet

a story that seemed to have no end until now

God knows i tried to guard and guide you

but i was blind to

your youthful illusions

you say you're playing for keeps

so why are you hitting the streets

you're playing for keeps 

so why are you hitting the streets

if you're playing for keeps 

and i see what looks like someone running away

the closer i get i start to see that it's just me

it was never us and i'm damn sure it was never you

so what are you trying to do?

you say you're playing for keeps

so why are you hitting the streets

you're playing for keeps 

so why you hitting the streets

if you're playing for keeps 

someday someone will tell it like it is

until then you'll be getting fooled again

the complacency of a generation 

a generation of woes  

Reviews

[Lovecraft]

A quality over quantity poem with just the right amount of repetition that adds more meaning to this poem.

The first stanza is well-written and I like the mention of "Hollywood Starlet", making it seem like she's from the 1940's or 1950's.

Nice poem, Mercy! :)

[mercy party]

Thanks man! Your mention of the time setting makes me feel a little pride in it. Thanks for the that acknowledgement.

[Lovecraft]

Of course, dude! :)

[BBP]

Had to read this again! This time as a song... the chorus kicked a*s and the words ring true for calling someone out on being shady and restless...
Looking for greener grass in the middle of a desert ........

[mercy party]

right on! thanks, for checking it out. very cool analogy.

[BBP]

Lol we can blame it on tequila and 'Colorado gold' lmao

[BBP]

Reminds me of an oldies song. That means I love it. Nice write MP!

[mercy party]

B. i am glad, and i sure thank you.

[David R Gonzalez]

Very nice and enjoyable read. It has great use of emphasis to drive the point home. I feel like the ending changes the tone of the entire poem. thanks for posting

[mercy party]

thanks for your time and review. i wasn't sure if the end went off track a bit or if it worked, glad you enjoyed.

[Tony Jordan]

Some people don't know what they want. They one thing and mean another or do another which totally conflicts with their stated aims and views.
Imagine how a flower would feel if a butterfly landed and then decided not to spread the pollen because it was in it's mind not a lowly butterfly but a fecking eagle !!

I could see 'The streets' singing this one M.P.
Very cool conclusion.
:)

[mercy party]

That was a feckin boss review! thanks for doing me justice.

[JessyJacob]

Then it might not be flower, it must be its prey. Why would a fecking eagle fall on butterfly, thinking as its prey on flower. Then they know what they mean and what they want.

I am not hurting anyone, its my thoughts to above comments, Tony.
I like the "The streets" singing.

[Tony Jordan]

You're thoughts are very welcome jessyjac.
Thank you.
:))

[Sami Khalil]

Musical and enchanting. You write with openness and an uplifting spirit...:::))))

[Papaya]

Hits hard MP, especially the repeating verse.
Does feel a tad tragic. Good one.

[mercy party]

just a tad. lol. so glad you checked it out. Thank you much!

[wordman]

well , i enjoyed the walk through history,brought back memories

[mercy party]

thank you, memories can be good, right?

[wordman]

the longer you live,the more you rely on them

[mercy party]

nicely said, and oh so true.

[SkinlessFrank]

the social commentary here is sad and hard-hitting, like a bad hangover

[mercy party]

thanks for that. I enjoy your take on it!

[Pete]

yes, this would make a great song. tells a sad tale. nicely written. poignant ending. cool title that catches.

[mercy party]

much appreciated.