The Who, Where, What, When’s and Why’s

The Who, Where, What, When’s and Why’s

Who can help? Hold love words, be my action. I am not a brand of lost, did I escape broken, do I fight wanting to inflict pain, is that bad? Coward, where I point the finger, but am I just the other evil, maybe I should embrace it, Stay bad forever? Do I have to attract a different kind of energy? What is a loyal reliable reflection from the mirror? Why do I slow my positive forward thinking thought If it hurts me so? Does my perspective need to change? When I badly need new eyes.

Reviews

[Michaela]

lol thank you again for the feedback I guess I am allows more focused on the content and just begun to explore the importance of its delivery, thank you for bringing that to my attention!

[BLACK PRINCE]

I can feel that you have a philosophic view on life.
And I think that is wonderful.
Once you incorporate your philosophic and poetic mind
you'll be an amzing writer/poet.

The poem is good.
But I think you need to structure it and break it into stanzas.
That way, readers can digest and use their imagination to understand
the concept you are trying to depict.
Because it is very important, as a poet, how your words appear to the reader.
You also have to know how to properly use punctuations.

I guess you coul put it like this.........

Who can help?
Hold love words. Be my action.
I am not a brand
of lost.
Did I escape broken?
Do I fight wanting to inflict pain?
Is that bad?
Coward.
Where do I point the finger?
Am I just the other evil?
Maybe I should embrace it.
Stay bad forever?
Do I have to attract
a different kind of energy? What is
a loyal, reliable reflection
from the mirror?
Why do I slow my positive forward-thinking
thought
if it hurts me so?
Does my perspective need to
change?
I badly need new eyes.



I AM ONLY TRYING TO HELP ANOTHER POET
BRING HER IDEAS ACROSS.