Nature is my metaphor

Nature is my metaphor

A Poem by Mirna
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I feel bitter.

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But the flower that’s already so bright

And deeply coloured

And has its leaves reaching above its petal

Has never screamed and wept and sniffled

Or yanked its heart away from the soil

because it hasn’t received the drops of water that could nourish

 Its lungs and state of mind

And because nature is a metaphor

 for the human life

I hope that I could be like the flower

And bear the day where

There is no inspiration to write

© 2014 Mirna


Author's Note

Mirna
the poem sounds random and childish and too emotional but so am I

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Wow, I like what you did with the typical flower metaphor. You've got a good understanding of language and how to set up internal turns in the poem. I couldn't see or want it any differently than this, I too hope to be able to bear that burden one day.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Mirna

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much :) it means a lot xx
I don't find this piece childish at all Mirna! I think it has a mature depth to it and I really enjoyed the read! :)

~Stefanie

Posted 10 Years Ago


Mirna

10 Years Ago

thank you stefanie, your comments are always kind :)xx
The level of emotion draws attention to the important message you share.
poetry in truth and nature.. loved every word Mirna, 100/100



Rossen

Posted 10 Years Ago


Mirna

10 Years Ago

thank you so much :) xx
I had too read this a few times to get its feel, I sense some emotion, You speak of the flower but the flower has no arms to do all , It has no heart or mind , It just bares its beauty, it takes water for the flower to keep going, Just as us we cant live without water. We have to look deep within all for our roots to be planted, Sometimes in the mist of it all we cant see the beauty and that makes us seem we are not much at all. To find that inspiration we have to let go and look beyond .

Posted 10 Years Ago


Mirna

10 Years Ago

haha Jon you're an amazing literary analyser :) it's nice that we still have people like you who car.. read more
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10 Years Ago

I just see what I see is all, Yeah I care, How could I not seems words is one the many things gives .. read more
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Added on March 8, 2014
Last Updated on March 8, 2014
Tags: Nature, Writing, Poetry, Poem, Inspiration, I give up

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Mirna
Mirna

Abu Dhabi, Al Ain, United Arab Emirates



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I am a writer who is shy yet courageous, humble yet loud, wanting to break out of my shell and reach people and tell them we have the same problems, the same fears, the same hopes, and the same loves,.. more..

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