Eyes Wide Open

A story of a prostitute who found love

 

 

Entrapped with this life,she’d created.

Accepting, fate had her pinned as doomed.

Dreams once dreamed, eternally faded.

Her heart protected, tightly cocooned.

 

On love, devoted her every desire.

Her love freely given,never returned.

Her eyes now sealed shut,by soul’s hot fire.

Unseen fate, will soon have the tables turned.

 

Passion for money,with a very stiff price.

Taunted by daylightand trapped by the night.

Discontent, no pleasure by everything nice.

A proposition, she should’ve thought twice!

 

A change was, slowly growing within her.

A new life, cradling destiny inside.

As if pure fate, birthed the perfect cure.

Waves of emotion,flow like the rising tide.

 

Her eyes now wide open,of what she must do.

This life she’d been living, now left behind.

A surge of devotion,to try something new!

She was no longer numb and no longer blind.

 

While holding her daughter,so precious and small.

A promise was made,true till the end of time.

"My heart I saved, now to you I give it all.

My life, my devotion,with my eyes wide open!"

 

 

Reviews

[cynthiabuhainbaello]

Emotional transition of the character from darkness to light and then the resolution to stand, for the sake of a young life. The poem relates it in very strong and profound words, a poetic metamorphosis that ends with perceived triumph over flaws. Great theme, impact and composition.

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

Thank you for seeing exactly what my point of the poem was! Thank you!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Love can save us all... and it only takes a miracle to bring it into our lives... a child is the greatest miracle of all. Lovely poem.

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

BEAUTIFUL, dear... the music is so well chosen, with the gift of your words.... Emotionally true, a wonderful stand up for those who have it harder than us... I only can bow for your quill. You're one of my favorite writers of today. Close to me. Those who have been through, shall find healing in YOUR words. Excellent.

E.L. 100!

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

You are oh, so very kind my friend. Guess we are each other’s favorites! ;)

Hahaha true!!! p.s. honest dear, I'm honest too :D ♥

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

;) even better! :P

:D

[Laura Maidah]

I liked the video better than the poem. That girl is creepy.

[Akhand Pratap Singh]

Is there some thing better than outstading?? wait let me say it.. superfantabulaslouslleant!! it was amazing..wow and the music I loved it...I can feel your love right till me, its people like you who show that a poem is written by one's true heart feeling..an those who show how much one can love someone.. beautiful.

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

Your words are of the upmost kindness, I am humbled by them…thank you!

[Riley]

Very emotional poem. I love your ending. Having a child can change a person completely!

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

My children changed mine. Thank you.

[EMF]

The Objectivity here creates a sheer perfection of a poem. While many place themselves at the centre, you have stepped to one side and viewd things as an outsider. Both are perfectly acceptable, but here, it is that voice that creates the scenario. Add onto that you have a perfectly metered poem, with great use of language, theme and emotion.
The result...?
Perfection

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

You are so very, very kind!

[BlueDreams]

Emotions just flowed wildly in this piece.. A deep Melancholy is hid that makes it captivating .. :-)

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

Thank you so very much!

[Aehr]

emotional, moving and... honest. Well done!

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

Thank you!

[Pencrafter]

Your poem is emotional and thought-provoking. Overall, it has a very positive feel to it, probably because the character comes to realize that we do have the power to make choices and change our life for the better. I'm new to the Cafe, but would like to know why you have photograph slide shows? I enjoy photography. How do you include pictures?