Woman of the night

A poem about modern society.

Red rivers run down her arms

Crimson blood oozing through scars

Once a pretty face now covered in scabs

She has no car

No money for cabs

 

So she waits by the side

Of every street

Naïve to any danger

Afraid of whom she may meet

 

Her feet encased in heels

Her pupils dilated  

She doesn't feel humiliated

 

Alcohol coursing through her veins

Heroine helps numb her pain

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

This Is my first poem. Please review and comment. Thank you for reading.

Reviews

[Vria P Crow]

INTRODUCTION

1. The "Woman of the Night" is commonly associated with prostitution.

VOCABULARY I ENJOY

1. Crimson
2. Diluted
3. Scabs

CONTENT

"Red Rivers" is an excellent poetic image. It converges the physical impurities into something attractive to the mind's eye. Then the writer continues to depict the woman's true character:

1. Pennyless
2. Jobless
3. Ugly

Prostitution has become popularized given the decline in economy. At this point, the protagonists is a shadow of her former self. The reader can imagine her life beforehand. She most likely was successful whether she was a college student, dancer, or family woman.

The woman in the poem appears to be a broken drug addict. She needs to be rescued, but she does not know where to ask for help.

CONCLUSION

Subjectively, she is a mortified "Woman of the Night" despite her i l l u s i o n. She would not need depressants and drugs if she was not scared.

I cannot judge her harshly because I know woman that were caught in the business. It appears to be an easy fix, but in reality, it is not.

Well done for your first poem, Sonnet Moon! As a suggestion, I would recommend writing more :)

[sonnetmoon]

Your review was extremely helpful. I will continue to write more :)

[Vria P Crow]

Thank you :) I am happy I could help!
Happy writing!

[Perkele.7885]

Why is the only question? and what did she feel that she had to escape from. It cost her more to escape from reality than living reality itself and with the degradation!

[katnisscat]

That was your FIRST poem?!
My first poem was crap...wow.
I like it.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very sad poem based on truth. Some situation lead to no-where. The strong description made the poor woman come alive in vision and in thoughts. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[sonnetmoon]

Thank you for your review coyote. I am glad that you liked the description in my poem. I really wanted the protagonist to come alive.
-sonnetmoon

[Stephen]

I think it is so sad how a woman thinks she has to degrade herself to be noticed and feel loved. There is so much more out there if she could just take the time to look and enjoy herself for who she is... nice work!!

[sonnetmoon]

Thank you for reading my poem Stephen. I am planning on writing another one soon.
-sonnetmoon

[Stephen]

never stop the ink from flowing in your veins

[sonnetmoon]

I have written a knew poem called Fragments.

[lee von cleef]

The pen, dog ear a page, of a soul, some soul you have seen, then share it here on this page, Add to the light, even if you have to push the dark into the white. Know what you believe. then sit up straight,not like a sack of potatoes, square those shoulders, Pen it where we can feel it, believe now every day believe.

[sonnetmoon]

lee von cleef, I appreciate your words. Thank you for commenting.
-sonnetmoon

[iandyou.]

nice! could extend it if you want to , ends slightly abruptly , but none the less its very well written , even the way you have structured it is pretty nice :) loved how vividly you have expressed her!

[sonnetmoon]

Thank you for reviewing my poem

[EbruS]

Really good :) You may extend it if you like. I think it would be great to read about this subject with all the details included :)

[sonnetmoon]

I might extend it but im afraid I might ruin my work. Thank you for reviewing my poem EbruS.

-sonnetmoon