Keep Me In Your Dreams

Keep Me In Your Dreams

A Poem by James Paranormal
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Just another rookie attempt at writing a poem using an iambic pentameter as a form. Written for PoetryLake.com - metered

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Never write poetry for those like me,
not tomorrow, or when in deep sorrow.

But your heart will always remember me,
tonight, tomorrow, just not forever.

Never express your loving words for me,
not tomorrow, or when in deep sorrow. 

But let the breeze rest against your cheek,
as you daydream under the summer oak tree.

Never write poetry for those like me,
but think of me when you write the last verse.

© 2020 James Paranormal


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It seems as though you really don't want a last verse. There is no tomorrow, today just continues on and on and the feelings you have are forever. Always sharing the cool breeze and daydreams under the oak tree.
Of course, I could be wrong.
Take care - Dave


Posted 2 Years Ago


I like the repeated lines as a form here (start/end) - kinda comes off as a full circle. I've used this before in my writes too. Great way to close the poem with an impactful ending lines.
"Never write poetry for those like me,
but think of me when you write the last verse."

I like the turn of the phrase at the end, "last verse".
Tell's a lot lot about the wishes, how the protagonist of this poem wants to be remembered.

Thanks for sharing!

Posted 3 Years Ago


well you can ask but they might not listen... resonance can last an awful long time even when you think it is blocked out it has a funny way of returning:/ I write for an audience of one... and each and every one of them is as precious as my last breath:) clever clever penning

Posted 3 Years Ago


This was enjoyable yet eerie.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Daydreaming under a summer oak. That's the place to be. That's the place to get inspiration to write poetry. Warm day, breeze against the cheek. Absolutely ideal. I'm a lover of trees by the way.

Chris

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

James Paranormal

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much for the thoughtful review, I appreciate your poetic insight and kind words, always.. read more
Chris Shaw

3 Years Ago

You are very welcome.
Interesting write...... love the last two lines, especially the second to last line the most. :) really beautiful line.
Sorry, for altering my review a little....I'm a very indecisive soul... especially lately..
:)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

James Paranormal

3 Years Ago

Also, thanks so much for reading :)
light and ashes

3 Years Ago

I like it, but as always that's up to the writer. The concept is definitely different.
light and ashes

3 Years Ago

You are welcome. :)
But let the breeze rest against your cheek,
as you daydream under the summer oak tree.

how utterly smooth this lovely piece flows..
I so love the above lines ..so serene
so beautifully expressed

nice work


Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

James Paranormal

3 Years Ago

Thanks friend, just having some fun, I appreciate ya :)

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Added on June 26, 2020
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James Paranormal
James Paranormal

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